Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

45% of the people who use the library are Full-time undergraduate students.

7% of them are Academic staff.

8% of them are people who are not physically available there known as distant learners.

16% of them are part-time postgraduate students.

25% of them are full-time postgraduate students. These students are the second most visitors out of all the visitors.

65% of people are satisfied by library opening hours and 35% are fairly satisfied.

95% of people are satisfied by the behaviour of staff and 5% fairly satisfied.

50% are satisfied with the books available in library,40% are fairly satisfied and 10% are not satisfied.

45% are satisfied with the amount of journals available,35 are fairly satisfied and 20% are not satisfied.

48 percent of all the people are satisfied on the reliability of the wifi,33% of them are fairly satisfied and 19% of them are not satisfied.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main categories and survey results, the report lacks an overview or a summary of the key trends. The information is presented as a list of isolated facts rather than a cohesive report. To improve, you must group related data points, provide a clear introductory statement, and include a concluding summary that highlights the most significant findings, such as the high satisfaction levels with staff behavior compared to other categories.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. Each sentence is presented as a separate, disconnected point, which makes the text feel like a raw list of data rather than a structured report. There is a complete absence of cohesive devices (such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore') to link ideas or compare the data sets. To improve, you should organize the information into logical paragraphs—for example, one for user categories and one for satisfaction levels—and use transition words to guide the reader through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is repetitive and basic. You rely heavily on phrases like 'X% of them are' and 'X% are satisfied with'. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or proportions. For example, instead of repeating 'satisfied', you could use 'content', 'pleased', or 'expressed satisfaction'. Furthermore, the phrasing 'not physically available there known as distant learners' is clunky and unnatural. Expanding your range of synonyms and using more precise academic collocations would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical structure is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences. There is no attempt to use complex structures or subordinate clauses, which are necessary for a higher band score. While the sentences are generally understandable, there are minor errors, such as 'satisfied on the reliability' (should be 'with') and '35 are fairly satisfied' (missing the percentage sign). To improve, focus on combining simple sentences using conjunctions and relative clauses to create more sophisticated, varied sentence patterns.

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