Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This pie chart illustrates main features of library users at a university with various educational  programs for specific period of time.Although library user satisfaction is implemented according to users values  shows reasonable results.

Firstly, the distance learning courses of library shows significant fall 8% as compared to other distributed strategies.Because demands of these flexible courses in the educational repository decrease and graduates database increased with plenty of time.In addition full time graduates portray 44 percent of coverage and students like to prefer full time alumna for their career growth.On the other side academic staff represents 7 percent working patterns in which segments of individual are satisfied with the help of staff about 95%.While part time post graduate reveal  16% exceed in book collecting area  which play significant role in  availability of books and journal  comprised of 95% collectively.Furthermore use of wifi in library database demonstrate satisfied results according to  books reading room.However full time post graduate exibit 25%  of database user with substantial advancement in students  and they are fairly gratify with facilities of library.But with the favourable job overall library is effective for development and economic enlargement of university.

In conclusion, with specific fluctuations in different groups full time undergraduate indicate exceeding students and bring remarkable opporunities for better end users in book collecting  sector.Finally it amuse a crucial role in library working area and delightful performance  of subscribers are helpul in resonant framework of library.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the provided chart and table showing library user categories. However, the task achievement is hindered by a lack of clear and accurate data reporting. Instead of accurately selecting and comparing key features from the visual data, the text is filled with vague statements, misinterpretations of percentages, and irrelevant commentary that obscures the actual information presented. For instance, statements regarding full-time graduates portraying '44 percent of coverage' and part-time postgraduates exceeding '16% in book collecting' fail to synthesize the actual statistical relationships coherently. To achieve a higher band score, the writer must carefully select prominent trends and figures from the charts and report them objectively and accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response exhibits basic paragraphing, dividing the essay into an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the overall logical progression is severely disrupted by confusing transitions and erratic connections between ideas. Cohesive devices are often used inappropriately or mechanically, such as 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' 'On the other side,' and 'Furthermore,' which fail to establish clear relationships between sentences. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader struggling to follow which demographic group or data point is being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within the paragraphs is weak, resulting in a fragmented text that lacks smooth progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is largely basic and repetitive, with frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations that impede clear communication. Phrases such as 'graduates database increased with plenty of time,' 'full time alumna for their career growth,' and 'economic enlargement of university' demonstrate a limited control over lexical items and academic style. There are also noticeable issues with word formation and terminology related to charts and data reporting. While the writer attempts to use some less common vocabulary, inaccuracies in meaning and collocation restrict the range and reduce precision, aligning the response with Band 4.5 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response relies heavily on a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but attempts at complex clauses are frequently faulty and ungrammatical. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions, and tense usage, such as 'the distance learning courses of library shows,' 'students like to prefer,' and 'exibit 25% of database user with substantial advancement.' Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing commas disrupting the flow. The frequency of grammatical errors causes noticeable strain for the reader and prevents the clear expression of ideas, placing this performance firmly in the lower-mid range.

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