Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart reveals the statistics of results of a survey of library users at a university. It can be clearly seen that there is a close competition among the given facts, whereas the trends reflect an evident fluctuation across the percentage line.
The statistics now need to be illustrated individually-cum-comparetively. First, we wil take Full-time undergraduate into account as the one dominating the chart 44%. It can be seen that the percentage gradually mounts and Academic staff 7%. Next, the categories of library users like part-time postgraduate, distance learning and academic staff.
Occupying the second place differs only by 25% and here the percentage decrease slowly. At third appears part-time postgraduate 16%, which statistically lags behind the top two, desecnding bottom-wards. Lastly, academic staff remains on the lowest position in the chart falling dramatically in average.
The second table reflects a similar situation of trends. Here library user satisfaction. satisfaction level divided into 3 categories very satisfied, fairly satisfied and not satisfied. Helpfulness of staff highly satisfied.
In conclusion, therfore, it is objective present a wide range of facts illustrating a whole mechanism. Considering the facts, the fluctuation depicts a significant activity in the said field
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning the pie chart and table regarding library users and satisfaction levels. However, the student fails to accurately report the main features or provide a coherent summary of the data presented in the visual prompts. Phrases like 'close competition among the given facts' and 'fluctuation across the percentage line' do not accurately describe static survey data like a pie chart. Key data points are either omitted or stated confusingly, such as misinterpreting the relative sizes and categories ('Occupying the second place differs only by 25%'). The overview of the table is extremely vague and incomplete. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response shows an attempt to structure the writing into paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are severely disrupted by unclear phrasing and abrupt transitions. Sentences such as 'The statistics now need to be illustrated individually-cum-comparetively' read like meta-commentary rather than natural academic cohesion. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'In conclusion, therfore, it is objective present...'). Paragraphing is disjointed, and the relationships between ideas are frequently confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended argument. This corresponds to the Band 4.5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with noticeable errors in word formation and collocation. Examples include 'individually-cum-comparetively', 'percentage decrease slowly', and 'desecnding bottom-wards'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are frequently inaccurate ('objective present a wide range of facts') and impede smooth reading. Spelling errors (e.g., 'therfore', 'desecnding') also occur. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple meanings, aligning with a band score of 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty or incomplete. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the response, such as missing verbs ('Here library user satisfaction. satisfaction level divided into 3 categories') and incorrect prepositional usage or clause structure ('It can be seen that the percentage gradually mounts and Academic staff 7%'). These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning. This performance is characteristic of Band 4.0.
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