Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This is a diagram with a chart display the numbers and ratio in differenet categories of library users, and a table down below show the satifaction between five types materials of library.

For the pan chart, full-time undergraduate in parts of forty-four percent, they are the largest user group, by the way, full-time postgreduate stand for a quarter percentage. Full-time study contain in sixty nine percent. For the part-time postgraduate only got sixteen percent, but they are third largest. At least, the distance learner,which conclude all coureses, they stand for eight percent, academic staff are seven percent, also the minimum groups. Library opening hours and helpfulness of staff are without any dissatisfaction, but some are faily satisfied, the availability of books and journals have a few not satisfied, which show ten and twenty percent. Otherwise,the ratio in very satisfied of availability of journals below half percent. At the end the reliability of wi-fi regularly with availability of journals. Additionaly, they still need effort to improve.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover both the pie chart and the table by mentioning the largest user group (full-time undergraduates at 44%) and touching upon the satisfaction levels for library opening hours and wi-fi. However, the response suffers from significant inaccuracies and poor selection of data. For instance, the writer claims that 'availability of journals below half percent', which completely misreads the provided table showing 45% very satisfied. Furthermore, comparisons are weak, and the presentation of data is muddled with conversational phrases ('by the way', 'at least'). The overview lacks clarity regarding the main trends. This performance aligns with Band 5, as the task is addressed only partially with noticeable misinterpretations of the figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is presented in a very poorly structured format with only two overly dense paragraphs, lacking proper introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, resulting in disjointed sentences and a lack of logical progression. Phrases like 'At the end the reliability of wi-fi regularly with availability of journals' and 'Additionaly, they still need effort to improve' demonstrate awkward transitions and unclear referencing. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the pie chart data from the table data. This corresponds to Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently and cohesion is faulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student's vocabulary is basic, repetitive, and heavily influenced by informal spoken styles (e.g., 'by the way', 'At the end', 'only got sixteen percent'). There are frequent word-choice errors, such as using 'diagram' and 'chart display', 'pan chart' instead of pie chart, and 'satifaction' instead of satisfaction. Attempts at less common vocabulary result in awkward collocations, such as 'full-time study contain in sixty nine percent'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic facts, though errors often strain the reader's understanding. This performance fits Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains numerous basic errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'a chart display the numbers', 'table down below show', and 'distance learner,which conclude all coureses, they stand for eight percent'. There is an over-reliance on simple clauses linked incorrectly with commas (comma splices), and complex structures are frequently faulty. Punctuation and spelling errors (e.g., 'differenet', 'satifaction', 'postgreduate', 'faily', 'Additionaly') are noticeable and cause difficulty for the reader. This is characteristic of Band 4, where errors are frequent and structures are very limited.

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