Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The stipulated pie chart and table shows the outcome of a study of books area at the campus. The data is calibrated in categories and figures.

Overall, it is crystal clear that full-time undergraduate has maximum as well as academic staff has minimum value.

Having a mypoic look, it lucid that the image is combine with library users cattegories and how much users is satisfied with it and there are categories of users which depict the percentage for an insances full-time undergraduate has 44%, distance learners leran at from home so they dont need to use library so they have 8%, part-time postgraduate has 16%, and the last categori has the second large percent cover in this pie chart which is 25% and the name of the particular categori is full-time postgraduate.

Furthermore, it can be vividly seen that there are also a categori of member who's satisfied from library and if we move to the number then library opening hours the member is mostly very satisfied and 0 number of not satisfied member and if we look around all the table most of the member is satisfied with helpfulness of staff cover 95 member is very satisfied and 0 is not satisfied and from availability of journals has 20 member who is not satisfied.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover both the pie chart and the table, but falls short of a well-developed overview. While the student identifies extremes such as the full-time undergraduates at 44 percent and academic staff at 7 percent, the selection of data is erratic and lacks clarity. For instance, the reference to 'distance learners leran at from home so they dont need to use library' introduces external speculation not supported by the prompt. Furthermore, the description of the satisfaction table is vague and confused, referring simply to 'member' rather than percentages or specific categories of survey respondents. The overview is weak, identifying only basic maximums and minimums without synthesising the broader trends. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band score of 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response exhibits severe issues with logical progression and paragraphing. The text is broken into very short, poorly structured paragraphs, including a single run-on sentence that constitutes the entire third paragraph ('Having a mypoic look...'). Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, resulting in a mechanical and repetitive flow. Phrases like 'Having a mypoic look' and 'if we look around all the table' are inappropriate for academic writing. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear; for example, it is difficult to determine what 'the last categori' or 'the image is combine' refers to. Although there is an attempt at an introduction and an overall statement, the lack of effective signposting and logical organisation pulls the score down to 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

Vocabulary is limited and marred by frequent spelling errors, typos, and inappropriate word choices. Examples include 'mypoic' instead of myopic, 'cattegories', 'insances', 'leran', and 'categori'. The student relies heavily on basic, repetitive vocabulary ('has maximum', 'has minimum value', 'number of member'). While there are attempts to use less common words, such as 'stipulated', 'calibrated', and 'vividly', these are often used unnaturally or incorrectly in context (e.g., 'The data is calibrated in categories and figures'). The frequent errors in word formation and spelling cause strain for the reader, placing this submission firmly in the band 4.0 to 4.5 range, leading to a score of 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely restricted, dominated by simple sentences and excessively long, unpunctuated compound-complex sentences. For example, the sentence beginning with 'Having a mypoic look...' runs on for over sixty words with multiple clauses incorrectly joined by conjunctions rather than proper punctuation. Grammatical errors are pervasive, including subject-verb agreement issues ('full-time undergraduate has', 'staff has', 'user is satisfied'), incorrect preposition use ('leran at from home'), and faulty verb forms ('is combine'). There is a complete lack of control over complex structures. Due to the high frequency of basic and complex structural errors that occasionally impede understanding, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.

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