Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart and the table give a data of a suvey of library users at a university.

Overall, the pie chart categories of library users the major 44 percent proportion used by the full time undergraduate students and the smallest part accupied by the academic staff In addition statisfaction percent are average.

Th pie chart dived into five proportion the major 44 percent part is coverd by the full time Undergraduate scholor and 25 percent used by the full time learner , However only partime postgraduate students cover 16 percent or 8 percent used by the all courses pupils from distance learning and remaining 7 percent accupied by academic staff.

The table gives library user satisfaction report from five different sources and these revies devided into 3 part mostly 95 pecent people very satisfied by helpfulness of staff

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it contains only 140 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. Furthermore, while the student attempts to describe the pie chart and the table, the information provided is incomplete and cut short due to the insufficient length. The overview touches upon the main features (full-time undergraduates being the largest group and academic staff the smallest), but lacks comprehensive coverage of the table data, mentioning only the helpfulness of staff. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure the word count requirement is met and provide a more fully developed summary of key trends and figures across all visual elements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. Transitions between ideas feel abrupt, and cohesive devices are used clumsily or inaccurately (for instance, starting sentences with 'Th pie chart dived into five proportion' and 'However only partime postgraduate'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical flow is disrupted by frequent structural and grammatical errors. Paragraphing is attempted, but the paragraphs are underdeveloped and fail to guide the reader smoothly through a well-structured comparison of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is basic and limited, and the text contains numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'suvey', 'accupied', 'statisfaction', 'dived', 'coverd', 'scholor', 'partime', 'revies', and 'devided'. There is little evidence of less common vocabulary, and repetitive phrases are used throughout the response (e.g., 'full time undergraduate', 'percent'). These errors and the limited vocabulary range cause strain for the reader, keeping the lexical score at a modest level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. There are frequent, noticeable errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction, such as 'The given pie chart and the table give a data of a suvey' and 'mostly 95 pecent people very satisfied by helpfulness of staff'. Punctuation is also weak, with missing periods and commas. These errors frequently impede communication and demonstrate poor control over basic sentence patterns.

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