Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart shows the outsomes of a survey of liberary users at a university.

It also shows the classifications of liberary users . First it has Academic staff which is around 7% , then full-time undergraduates those around 44%, thirdly full-time postgraduate around 25% , fourthly part-time postgraduate almost around 16% , then last but not the least distance learning (all courses) alsmost 8% . So in my conclusion ,the chart shows 5 groups of liberary users are comes to liberary but there is not any clear comparison of the quantity .

Now come to the next step which is the table . So the table below shows information about user's fullfilment . It has 3 divisions , first one is very satisefied . Third one is fairly satisfied and the third one is not satisfied .

In liberary opening hours there is 65 people who very satisfied . 35 people who fairly safisfied . And o person is not satisfied. In helpfulness of staff 95 usrs very satisfied . 5 fairly satisfied and 0 person not satisfied.

In conclusion there is a huge amount of people who satisfied with liberaty .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to address both parts of the visual data by describing the pie chart and the table. However, the response contains significant weaknesses in data reporting and task execution. For the pie chart, the proportions are listed sequentially rather than synthesised or compared meaningfully (e.g., 'Academic staff which is around 7% ... full-time undergraduates those around 44%'). Furthermore, the commentary contains inaccurate observations, such as stating 'there is not any clear comparison of the quantity.' For the table, the student misinterprets percentages as raw people counts (e.g., writing '65 people who very satisfied' instead of percentages). There is no overarching overview provided, and the conclusion is overly simplistic. Consequently, the performance falls below Band 5.5 standards, as key features are misreported and the overview is absent.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The organisation of the text is heavily compromised by conversational and disjointed transitions, such as 'Now come to the next step which is the table' and 'So in my conclusion'. Paragraphing is haphazard, with ideas broken into short, fragmented sentences rather than cohesive analytical blocks. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and repetitively ('first one', 'Third one', 'And o person'), which fails to create clear progression. While the text is roughly divided into the two visual components, the lack of sophisticated referencing and logical transitions keeps the organisational quality at a lower band level. Pronoun referencing is also weak, leading to confusion between percentages and actual people.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical range is very basic and repetitive. Throughout the text, the student relies on elementary vocabulary and misspells several key words repeatedly, such as 'liberary' instead of library, 'outsomes', 'classifications', 'satisefied', 'safisfied', and 'fullfilment'. There is an inadequate control of word formation and spelling, which frequently strains the reader's understanding. Less common or academic vocabulary is entirely absent, and the misuse of vocabulary (such as treating percentages as headcount numbers of people) reflects a restricted lexical capacity suitable for this task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical structures attempted are largely simple or faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent structural errors throughout the response, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and awkward clause integration (e.g., '5 groups of library users are comes to library', 'there is 65 people who very satisfied', 'And o person is not satisfied'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are poorly managed, resulting in frequent run-on constructions or fragmented thoughts. The high density of basic grammatical errors impedes clear communication in several places, keeping the score firmly in the lower band range.

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