Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar graph illustrated the differenet type of people using library with ceratin percentage.
Overall w Library is Used by large number of full time undergradutes which is 44%, while part time postgraduates use it at 16 % . Academic staff can be shown in very less amount which is only 7%.
During the survey for library user satisfaction we can clearly see that 95% of the people are very satisfies with the helpfulness of staf , on the other hand 65% people are satisifies with the library opening hours, whereas 19% of the people are not satisfied with the realibility of wifi.
40% people are fairly satisfied with the availibiity of journals and which 10% not even satisfied,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover both parts of the prompt, mentioning the categories of library users (e.g., full-time undergraduates at 44%) and touching upon the satisfaction table (e.g., 95% for helpfulness of staff, 65% for opening hours, and 19% for wi-fi). However, the selection of main features is rather limited and selective. Furthermore, the task length requirement of at least 150 words is not met, as the response is only 119 words long. Consequently, the task response is under-developed and incomplete in its coverage of all the data provided in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is broken down into multiple short paragraphs and standalone sentences, which disrupts the logical flow and progression. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward (e.g., 'on the other hand', 'whereas'). Paragraphing is poorly handled, with single-sentence paragraphs such as '40% people are fairly satisfied...' appearing at the end. Overall, the arrangement lacks a cohesive and clear structure required for an academic summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive (e.g., 'people', 'satisfied', 'use'). There are several spelling and word-form errors, such as 'differenet', 'ceratin', 'undergradutes', 'satisifies', 'staf', 'realibility', 'availibiity', and 'journals and which 10% not even satisfied'. These lexical limitations and errors restrict the precision and fluency of the response, causing occasional strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. Errors include tense mistakes ('The bar graph illustrated' instead of 'illustrates'), missing articles ('using library'), and broken clause structures ('which 10% not even satisfied'). Punctuation and spacing errors are also frequent. While some basic sentences are clear, frequent errors impede communication in several places.
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