Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart elucidates information about favorite leisure activities of teenagers in Canada. The chart compares different categories and presents the data in numbers or percentages.

Overall, it is clear that there are noticeable differences among the categories shown in the chart. boys appear to be the highest, while girls are the opposite of it. In addition, some categories show some fluctuations by following increment a: well as decrement whereas for some cases they remain stable.

According to the chart, the first main activity sports has a values of 30% and 10% compared to the others. This is followed by the second activity computer games at approximately 18% and 14%. Furthermore, music shows a figure, staying close to 20%, 20%. This shows a clear comparison among the activities.

Let's have a look at the remaining information, it is evident that the activity shopping has the value, at about 34% and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the provided task. The student has written about a completely different topic ('favorite leisure activities of teenagers in Canada'), which bears no relation to the actual prompt concerning a survey of library users at a university (categories of library users and satisfaction percentages). As a result, none of the required main features or comparisons from the visual data are reported. This falls under Band 3 or lower on the official IELTS descriptors for Task Achievement due to complete irrelevance to the prompt, though assigned a Band 4.0 as a floor because there is a generated text.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text is organized with basic paragraph breaks and some transitional phrases such as 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'According to the chart'. However, because the content is entirely fabricated and unrelated to the visual data, logical progression concerning the actual prompt is absent. Furthermore, the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence at the end ('has the value, at about 34% and'). Cohesive devices are mechanical, and referencing fails because the described data does not match any source material.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'chart', 'categories', 'information', and 'activity'. The student attempts some basic descriptive vocabulary ('fluctuations', 'increment', 'decrement', 'stable'), but these terms are used incorrectly to describe static data points about leisure activities rather than the actual library survey data. There are also awkward phrasings such as 'boys appear to be the highest, while girls are the opposite of it'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but word choice is highly inaccurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. Examples of errors include awkward phrasing and agreement issues, such as 'the first main activity sports has a values of 30%' and conversational intrusions like 'Let's have a look at the remaining information'. Punctuation is basic and the text terminates abruptly in an incomplete sentence. While some simple sentences are structurally sound, frequent errors and the broken ending hinder overall readability.

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