Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of various library users satisfaction at in a different ages of the people.
Overall, an huge amount of full-time under graduates was observed to choose library for study to enhance their knowledge, however almost around 25% of full-time postgraduates was recorded to visit libraries, furthermore approximately 16% of the part-time postgraduates visited libraries, moreover only 7% of academic staff use libraries to reads books, All of the category of library users has feeling satisfied to visit libraries in first half of the day, however huge amount to people try to go always to those libraries, who have helpfull staff to guide the users, furthermore 50% of the very satisfied users approachs to the library having availability of books, and 48% of the people use digital books and journals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt, mentioning categories of library users from the pie chart and satisfaction percentages from the table. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the visual data. For instance, the opening sentence claims the chart illustrates user satisfaction in 'different ages of the people,' which is incorrect as the chart actually shows user categories by status (e.g., undergraduates, academic staff). Furthermore, the summary of the table is muddled and inaccurate, with confusing statements about users visiting in the first half of the day. Additionally, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 134 words. Consequently, the task response is underdeveloped and partially inaccurate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is organized into only two paragraphs, with the second paragraph being an extremely long, run-on sentence that lumps multiple disparate ideas together. This lack of proper paragraphing severely hinders the logical flow of the response. Cohesive devices are weak and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'furthermore' and 'however,' often used incorrectly to link unrelated thoughts. Referencing is also unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. While there is an attempt at an overall structure, the mechanical and faulty cohesion results in a poor score for this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive. The student uses basic vocabulary such as 'huge amount,' 'people,' and 'visit libraries' repeatedly. There are numerous word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'library users satisfaction,' 'an huge amount,' and 'approachs to the library.' Spelling and word formation issues are also present, for example, 'helpfull' and 'under graduates.' Although the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a very basic gist of some data points, the frequent errors and restricted range prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures extended by faulty coordinating conjunctions and clauses. There are persistent and frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'full-time postgraduates was recorded,' 'category... has feeling'), incorrect article usage ('the library having availability'), and preposition errors ('satisfaction at in a different ages'). Punctuation is also problematic, particularly the lack of periods in the overly long second paragraph, resulting in run-on sentences that strain the reader.
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