Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are many types of learner who use library books . Academic staff learners use library books are 7 percent people only whom use library books . The distance learning users are 8 percent ,its higher than academic staff but lower than others . Part time postgraduate users are 16 percent and the other side of full time postgradute users are 25 percent who use a library books .The learner who uses library books more much than others is a full time undergraduate students .The 65 percent users are very satisfied to library opening hours and the 35 percent users are fairly satisfied to library opening time . According to this graph there are nobody to not satisfied to library opening timing.The 95 percent users are agreed with helpfulness staff only reamianing 5 percent of users are fairly satisfied with helpfullness of staff and again there was nobody who not satisfied with the staff of library .There are 50 percent of users are very satisfied with the availbility of books and the 40 percent of users are fairly satisfied with availbility of books and the remianing 10 percent users are not satisfied to availbility of books . 45 users are satisfied to availbility of journals and 35 percent are farily satisfied and the others 20 is not satisfied. There are 48 percent of users are agreed with realibility of wifi and the 33 percent users are fairly satisfied and the others 19 are not satisfied .Mostly users are agreed with library opening hours and with helpfull staff.The users are not satisfied with wifi of library and shortage of books .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt: the pie chart showing categories of library users and the table detailing user satisfaction. The main features are identified, such as the highest proportion of users being full-time undergraduates at 44 percent and academic staff being the lowest at 7 percent. Comparisons are made between categories, and satisfaction data is reported. However, the response lacks a clear overall summary or overview paragraph. Furthermore, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data, such as stating '45 users are satisfied to availbility of journals' rather than 45 percent, and missing percentages for the journal availability category in places. Due to these under-developed sections and minor data misreadings, the response falls into Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, as it is presented as a single, dense block of text, which severely impacts the visual organisation and progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are repetitive and overly mechanical, relying heavily on phrases like 'The ... percent users are ...' and 'There are ... percent of users are ...'. While there is a basic chronological progression moving from the pie chart categories to the table's satisfaction metrics, the lack of paragraph division and basic referencing ('the others 20 is not satisfied') makes the overall arrangement difficult to follow. This performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptors for cohesion and paragraphing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Throughout the text, the student overuses simple terms and phrasings such as 'library books', 'users are very satisfied', and 'fairly satisfied'. There are notable lexical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'helpfulness staff', 'realibility of wifi', and 'availbility of books' (spelling error). The attempt to use less common vocabulary is minimal, and the restricted range forces the writer to repeat the same sentence structures and vocabulary items constantly. This vocabulary level is representative of a Band 5 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that result in frequent grammatical errors. Examples of errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('Academic staff learners use library books are 7 percent people only whom use library books'), missing prepositions, and awkward clause structures ('According to this graph there are nobody to not satisfied to library opening timing'). Punctuation is also weak, with spaces placed before commas and full stops throughout the text. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 4 level.

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