Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates that shows the result's of a survey of library uses in different categories and satisfaction in university.

Overall, it can be seen when the survey of library uses in university 44 percent in full time under-graduate and other fall in 25 percent in full time under-graduate and next more decrease in 16 percent part time postgraduate and next 8 percent Distance learning and 7 percent Academic staff.

Library uses satisfaction in percentage in different parts.when library opening hours 65 percent very satisfied and 0 percent Not satisfied and last Reliability of wifi 48 percent very satisfied and 19 Not satisfied.

In conclusion, all the uses of categories of library and library uses satisfaction in university.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to address both parts of the visual data by mentioning categories of library users and aspects of user satisfaction. However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 119 words. Furthermore, the information selected is presented in a very fragmented and confusing manner. For instance, the student writes '44 percent in full time under-graduate and other fall in 25 percent in full time under-graduate', which shows poor data reporting and misinterpretation of the categories. Important trends and comparisons are largely missing, and key details are inaccurately transcribed or awkwardly paraphrased. Because the task is under-length and lacks a fully developed overview or well-selected main features, it meets the criteria for Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the response is extremely weak. The text is divided into four very short, choppy sentences that fail to establish a clear logical progression. There is an absence of appropriate cohesive devices, and phrases are repeated mechanically, such as 'library uses satisfaction' and 'and next'. Paragraphing is virtually non-existent in any meaningful academic sense, as the sentences merely list isolated data points without a clear overarching structure or logical flow. Referencing between ideas is often unclear or absent, making the text difficult to follow. These issues align well with the Band 4 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect. The student repeatedly misuses the word 'uses' instead of 'users' (e.g., 'survey of library uses' and 'categories of library'). Other lexical choices are imprecise or non-standard, such as 'more decrease' and 'satisfaction in percentage in different parts'. There is no attempt at less common vocabulary, and spelling/word-choice errors are frequent. Although simple vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication, the high frequency of lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical structures attempted are very limited and heavily flawed. The response lacks complete, well-formed sentences; for instance, the opening sentence 'The pie chart illustrates that shows the result's of a survey...' contains double verbs and a redundant apostrophe. Many sentences are fragmented run-ons lacking standard verbs or logical subordination (e.g., 'when library opening hours 65 percent very satisfied...'). Punctuation and grammatical accuracy are poor throughout, with frequent errors that impede understanding and strain the reader. This falls squarely within the Band 4 descriptor for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.

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