Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrats the proportion of library user. while the table illustrats the survey of the university students.
Overall,pice chart accounted for full time undergraduse is the highest proportation of the figugre,while the table illustrats the data on library user student satasfaction.
pice charts illustrats the proportion of the library user the full time undergraduate students is the hisgest proportion of the chart at 44%.following of full time poastgratute is the second comon figer at 25%.third is part time post graduate at 16%.represented acadamic staff at 7% and distance larnin at 8% is alomost equal.
The table illustrats data on the student satasfaction is above on the helpfulness staff at 95.following of library open hours are the 2nd common students satasfaction . finally usage of wifi is the least satasfaction to us wifi.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize both the pie chart and the table, but falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 134 words. While the student identifies some key features—such as full-time undergraduates representing the highest proportion at 44% and staff helpfulness scoring highest in satisfaction at 95%—the overview is extremely basic and mechanically repetitive ('The pie chart illustrates... while the table illustrates...'). Furthermore, the data reporting is somewhat disjointed and lacks a fully developed comparison across all categories. Due to the under-length penalty and limited extension of ideas, this falls into the Band 5 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows an attempt at basic organization with an introductory statement, a body paragraph for the chart, and a final paragraph for the table. However, paragraphing and logical progression are weak. Sentences are disjointed and lack smooth cohesive links. Punctuation and capitalization are frequently misused (e.g., lowercase letters at the start of sentences like 'Overall,pice chart...'), and referencing is unclear or repetitive throughout the text. Overall cohesion is mechanical and faulty, aligning with a Band 4.5 or 5.0, though some overall arrangement is present.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'illustrats', 'pice', 'undergraduse', 'proportation', 'figugre', 'poastgratute', 'comon', 'acadamic', 'larnin', 'satasfaction'). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'proportion', 'satisfaction', and 'postgraduate', but the heavy concentration of spelling mistakes and limited lexical range restrict the score to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text relies heavily on simple sentence structures and incomplete or fragmented clauses (e.g., 'following of full time poastgratute is the second comon figer at 25%'). There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and article usage. Complex structures are either absent or faulty. Errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.
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