Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The Given chart and table below show the results of survey of library users at a university from selected specificed collage .
To Begin it can be seen that from chart and table there is given survey of collage library users.The University library categories users are , Academic staff is about 7%,Distance learning is 8% ,for some student part-time postgradute is 16% and the student who is full-time postgraduate is 25% and there is uage change is full time undergraduate student users are 44% it has drestic change.
However it can be see in table from the usage of collage library is given satisfaction in table form ,From library opening hours 65% users are very satisfied as comare to fairly satisfied is 35% anjd Not satisfied is 0.from the given table Helpfulness of staff is 95 very satisfied and availitby of book is 50,avaliobiulity of journalks are 45,reliability of wifi is 48 and fairy satisfied is 5,40,35,33%,and Not satisfied are 0,10,20,19 % From the given table .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both parts of the prompt, mentioning the categories of library users and the satisfaction percentages from the table. However, the selection of main features lacks clear synthesis or overview. While figures are cited, such as 'Academic staff is about 7%' and 'Library opening hours 65% users are very satisfied', the reporting becomes a mechanical listing of data points, particularly in the third paragraph where percentages are lumped together ('fairy satisfied is 5,40,35,33%'). This impacts the overall clarity and structure of task fulfillment. There is no clear concluding summary statement, keeping the response at a Band 5.0 level where information is presented with limited development.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays a rudimentary organizational structure, beginning with an introductory paraphrase followed by body paragraphs. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with the second and third paragraphs functioning as dense blocks of text. Cohesive devices are either misused, absent, or overly simplistic, as seen in phrases like 'To Begin it can be seen that' and the repetitive use of 'From the given table'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to track which percentage corresponds to which category in the final paragraph due to unlinked lists of numbers. Progression is hampered by these mechanical transitions, placing the response firmly in Band 4.5 to 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct lifting or awkward paraphrasing from the prompt (e.g., 'collage library', 'availitby of book', 'journalks'). There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'specificed', 'collage', 'postgradute', 'uage', 'drestic', 'comare', 'anjd', 'availitby', and 'avaliobiulity'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary fail due to inaccurate word choice and severe spelling issues that occasionally strain the reader's understanding. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, resulting in a Band 4.0 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structure of the essay is weak, characterized by heavy reliance on run-on sentences and faulty complex structures. For instance, the sentence starting with 'From library opening hours...' strings multiple clauses and lists together without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions. Punctuation is frequently misused or missing, leading to sentences that are difficult to parse, such as 'Helpfulness of staff is 95 very satisfied and availitby of book is 50...'. Errors in verb tense, agreement, and clause structure are pervasive and frequent, frequently causing difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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