Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart and table both illustrates, the result of a survey of library consumer at a university.
Overall it can be seen that the Categories of library users Full-time postgraduate is higher than Full-time undergraduate. it is noticeable that, library user satisfaction of ratio were divided in to five various category.
At the initial stages, categories of libraray user among that full-time undergraduate rose drametically 44%. while, the Full-time postgraduate were been decline upto 25%. In addition, approximately 16% of the part-time postgraduate have begin raising on it. as a result, the distance learning for all the courses were been falling 8% and the lowest ratio compared to all the Academic staff which consists only 7% on it.
on the other hand, the Library user satisfaction were been divided into several stages at the initial, Library opening hours for very satisfield 65 compared to lower 35 Fairly satisfield. Moreover, the highest was Helpfulness of staff was rising at the peak 95 and the lowest 5 Fairly satisfield. on account of, the two which remain similar such as Availability of journals, Reliability of wi-fi remain constant for both satisfield.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover both the chart and the table, but contains significant misinterpretations of the data. For instance, the student states that full-time postgraduates (25%) are higher than full-time undergraduates (44%), which directly contradicts the visual data. Furthermore, the description of the trends uses inappropriate dynamic verbs for static proportions (e.g., 'rose dramatically 44%', 'decline upto 25%'). While an overview is attempted, the overall reporting is confused and fails to accurately present the main features and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are severely disrupted by inaccurate referencing and disjointed sentences. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, leading to fragmented writing. For example, transitional phrases like 'At the initial stages' and 'on the other hand' are applied incorrectly to static survey data. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak, making the progression difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
Vocabulary usage is limited and heavily influenced by misuse of terms. The student struggles with basic academic collocations and reporting verbs, writing phrases like 'library consumer', 'library user satisfaction of ratio', and 'begin raising on it'. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, such as 'libraray', 'drametically', 'satisfield', and 'satisfield' repeated inappropriately. The lexical range is barely adequate to convey the intended message.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent basic errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'The chart and table both illustrates', 'the Full-time postgraduate were been decline upto 25%', and 'the two which remain similar'. Complex sentence attempts result in ungrammatical and unintelligible clauses. Punctuation is also erratic, with misplaced commas interrupting the flow of simple sentences.
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