Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.0)
categories of library users is divided into 5 basic parts. the full time undergraduate is 44% taht is maximum percentage in this basic whole parts and then which is lower then full time undergraduate is full time postgraduate is 25% which is lower the full time undergraduate and then in third part which is lower then full time under undergarduate and full time postgraduate is part time postgraduatte is 16 percentage and then in fourth part is distance learning all coursses included is 8 percent which is lower then all first 3 parts and then at the last part is academic staff s 7 percent which is lowest part other the all parts and and library satisfaction is
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response only partially addresses the task and fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly after 118 words. Furthermore, the candidate completely omits the entire table showing library user satisfaction ratings, focusing solely on the pie chart categories of library users. While some main features of the user categories are reported, such as the highest percentage for full-time undergraduates at 44 percent, the lack of an overview and the complete neglect of the satisfaction data severely limit the response. To reach a higher band, the student must ensure all parts of the visual data are covered, provide a clear summary of overall trends, and write at least the minimum required word count.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The text lacks proper paragraphing and organization, appearing as a single, endless run-on sentence connected excessively by repetitive conjunctions like 'and then'. There is no clear logical progression or structuring of information, and cohesive devices are used very mechanically and inaccurately. Referencing is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of data. To improve cohesion and coherence, the student should divide the response into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs grouping related data, and an overview. Using a wider variety of appropriate transition words and punctuating sentences correctly with periods rather than continuous 'and then' connectors will significantly enhance readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'percentage', 'part', 'lower', and 'highest'. There are noticeable word choice and spelling errors, such as 'taht' for 'that', 'undergarduate' for 'undergraduate', 'postgraduatte' for 'postgraduate', and 'coursses' for 'courses'. The range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic numerical data. To progress to a higher band, the student needs to incorporate a wider range of less common vocabulary and synonyms to describe data trends, such as 'proportion', 'segment', 'minority', and 'significantly lower', while also paying closer attention to accurate spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is severely restricted, consisting almost entirely of one massive, unpunctuated run-on sentence linked by coordinating conjunctions. There is a complete absence of complex sentence structures and correct punctuation, including missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and a failure to use full stops. Frequent errors in basic sentence construction and grammatical patterns impede communication. To achieve a higher score, the student must demonstrate control over simple and complex sentence forms, use correct capitalization and punctuation, and break down ideas into grammatically independent sentences rather than chaining clauses together indefinitely.
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