Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart give informtion regarding the categories of library

Overall the most of the full time undergradute people use the extream use of library whis is the 44% as compare to other lowest use of the library is academic staff which about 7% only as on other hand student learn more in the libaray and the other people learning less because the student reading books and complete the works in the library.

It is clearly visible from the pie chart the percentage of the full time postgraduate student tend to use medium library which is 25% and in the part time postgraduate people is likely to 16% use of the library and whose people travel from the long distance which was 8%. this is the chart show the people use of library in the year.

Most of the full time undergraduate student tend to use more library in the year as compare to the academic staff it is clearly visible in the pie chart

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes a minimal attempt to address the task by referencing some data from the pie chart, such as the highest percentage for full-time undergraduates at 44 percent and the lowest for academic staff at 7 percent. However, the second part of the visual data regarding library user satisfaction percentages across various categories like opening hours and staff helpfulness is completely ignored. Furthermore, the selection of features is poorly executed, and the inclusion of irrelevant personal speculation about students learning more because they read books detracts from the reporting of the visual data. The overall format and content remain restricted, preventing a complete overview of the provided materials.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout the text. The response lacks a clear logical progression, jumping abruptly between data points and repetitive statements without a structured overview or standard essay framework. Paragraphing is poorly handled, resulting in a single block or disjointed groupings of sentences that do not flow logically. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive phrasing such as 'it is clearly visible in the pie chart' appearing multiple times, which fails to guide the reader smoothly through the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary usage is basic and repetitive, utilizing a limited range of words and phrases to describe the chart. There are noticeable word choice and word form errors throughout the text, such as 'informtion', 'extream use', 'undergradute', and 'libaray', which stem from frequent spelling mistakes. The student attempts basic descriptive phrases, but inaccurate lexical choices and awkward collocations, such as 'use medium library' and 'travel from the long distance', strain the reader and limit precision in reporting statistical information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are persistent issues with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and missing articles, as seen in expressions like 'The given pie chart give informtion', 'the most of the full time undergradute people use', and 'whose people travel'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with run-on sentences lacking proper terminal punctuation or conjunctions, causing frequent difficulties for the reader in grasping the intended meaning.

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