Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the illustrate results of a survey of library users at a university. the library user satisfaction rate about library opening hours, helpfulness of staff, available of journals and reliability of wi-fi given in percentage rate such as very satisfied, fairly and not satisfied.

Overall the large percentage of the full time undergraduate library users and secondly most library users of full time postgraduate. other library users shown low satisfactin rate.

In term user satisfaction, helpfulness of staff achieved very satisfaction at 95% respondent reporting they were very and faily satisfied 5%. libraru opning hours also high recieved 65% very satisfied and fairly 35%. other all normal rate of satisfaction descibed available book at very fairly 50% and fairly 40%

the large percentage of the full time undergraduate library users at 44%, and secondly most library users of full time postgraduate 25%. other library users shown low satisfactin rate such as part time 16%, distance learing 8% and academic 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main user group correctly: full-time undergraduates account for 44%, followed by full-time postgraduates at 25%, and you include the smaller groups. You also report the high satisfaction with staff and opening hours. However, the response only partially covers the task: it omits the journal satisfaction figures and gives an incomplete account of books and wi-fi. The overview that other users had a “low satisfaction rate” confuses the proportion of user categories with satisfaction. The response also contains 149 words, one below the required minimum; the 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, give a clear overview of the strongest and weakest satisfaction results and compare the main categories accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some organisation: the opening introduces the survey, and the response moves from user categories to satisfaction results. However, progression is weakened by repetition: the final paragraph repeats the figures for undergraduate and postgraduate users already given in the overview. The satisfaction discussion is also incomplete and difficult to follow, with books mentioned briefly but journals and wi-fi left out. Linking phrases such as “Overall” and “In term user satisfaction” attempt to guide the reader, but the latter does not clearly connect the information that follows. Use distinct paragraphs for the two visuals, avoid repeating data, and group satisfaction results into clear comparisons, such as the highest ratings versus the less positive areas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “respondent,” “very satisfied,” and “reliability of wi-fi,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, word-form, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “available of journals,” “very satisfaction,” “faily,” and “satisfactin.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “other all normal rate of satisfaction” does not clearly describe the figures. Aim for accurate collocations and use the chart’s labels consistently. For instance, describe the “proportion of users” in each category, and say that respondents were “very satisfied” or “fairly satisfied,” rather than using “satisfaction” as an adjective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. The opening, “the illustrate results of a survey,” lacks a correctly formed subject and verb; “the library user satisfaction rate … given” also has faulty sentence structure and agreement. In “respondent reporting they were,” the participle does not fit the sentence, while “the large percentage of the full time undergraduate library users at 44%” is a fragment rather than a complete clause. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing or inaccurate. Practise building complete subject–verb sentences first, then add comparisons using structures such as “while” or “whereas,” checking agreement and punctuation.

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