Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given mixed chart is shows information about the chart and table below show the result of a survey of library users at a university.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The campares show different categories an presents and the date of library users. It is the higest categories is full time undergraduate is value is 44% percent, and the lowiest categories is Academic staff Its value is 7% percent, other library users is Full time postgraduate, its value is 25% percent and part time postgraduate it 16% value and last is Distance learning its value is 8% percent toward.In addition, The library user satisfaction is higest categories is Available of journals is very satisfied value is 45%, Fairly satisfied is 35% and not Satisfied is 20% and in the lowiest categories is Helpfulness of staff is very satisfied user is importance 95% percent and fairly satisfied is 5% percent and not satisfied is 0% percent, and the other categories is different values is the most important is Available of books is Very satisfied user is importance 50%, Fairly satisfied user is 40% and last is not satisfied is 10% percent importance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the largest user group correctly as full-time undergraduates (44%) and the smallest as academic staff (7%), and you report several satisfaction figures accurately, including staff helpfulness and book availability. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main satisfaction patterns, and it omits the opening-hours and wi-fi results. The claim that journals are the “lowest” satisfaction category is misleading: journals have the highest dissatisfaction (20%), but staff helpfulness has the highest very-satisfied result (95%). Some comparisons are also unclear, and the opening repeats the task wording rather than introducing the data effectively. Select the key contrasts across both visuals and summarise them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence from user categories to satisfaction results, and phrases such as “In addition” signal a shift between the two visuals. However, the response is presented as one long, crowded paragraph, so the information is difficult to follow. The opening repeats the task instructions, while the later section combines several figures in extended sentences joined mainly by “and.” This makes relationships between categories and satisfaction levels unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the chart and table, begin with a concise overview, and group related comparisons. Clear sentence boundaries and more precise linking would help the reader follow the report’s progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant terms, including “categories,” “satisfaction,” and “full-time undergraduate,” and the percentages are generally expressed in a recognisable way. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate or unnatural, as in “the higest categories,” “the campares show,” and “very satisfied user is importance.” Spelling errors such as “lowiest” and “higest” also reduce clarity. Several phrases appear copied from the prompt rather than adapted to describe the data. Build a more precise range for reporting charts—for example, “accounted for,” “proportion,” “rated,” and “dissatisfied”—and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect information in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often faulty and the meaning becomes difficult to follow. For example, “The given mixed chart is shows information” combines incompatible verb forms, while “its value is 25% percent and part time postgraduate it 16% value” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Articles, agreement, and punctuation are also inconsistent, and there are few controlled sentence patterns beyond repeated clauses joined with “and.” Use simple, complete sentences to report each comparison, then add a limited number of accurate complex sentences. Check verb forms, sentence boundaries, and the grammatical structure around percentages.

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