Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Categories of libaray users and the Circle can demonstrate the percentage of a libaray staff and lets began start the eassy .

First of all , the five section of the circle and show a percentage . 1.Academic staff has 7% and 2. Distance learning [all cources] is 8% and 3. is Part-time postgrduate is 16% and next 4. is Fulll time postgratuate is 25% and last once is 5. Full time undergraduate is 44% and I recognise every step csn increase dor other step . and second one is Library user satisfaction [%] . first is libaray opening hours is with satisaction 65% fairly satisfaction 35% and not satisfaction is 0% and helpfulness of staff with satisfaction is 95% and fairly stisfaction is 5% and not saisfaction is 0% and availability of books with satisfaction is 50% and fairly satisfaction is 40% and not satisfaction is 10% and availability of journals with satisfaction is 45% and fairy satisfaction is 35% and not satisfaction is 20% and last one is reliability of wi-fi with satisfaction is 48% and fairly satisfaction is 33% and not satisfaction is 19% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures from both the user-category chart and the satisfaction table, and most of the reported percentages match the data. For example, you correctly identify undergraduates as 44% and staff helpfulness as 95% very satisfied. However, the response mainly lists figures rather than summarising the main features. It gives no clear overview of the largest user group or the strongest and weakest satisfaction results, and the claim that each category “can increase” is not supported by this one-time breakdown. The opening also misdescribes the visuals as a “Circle” and a percentage of “library staff.” To improve, identify the key contrasts and present them accurately before selecting supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic sequence: it first reports the user categories and then moves to satisfaction results. This gives the reader some sense of the two parts of the task. However, the information is largely presented as one long, crowded paragraph, with numbered items and repeated “and” doing most of the linking. The transition “and second one” is not enough to create clear paragraph-level organisation, while “I recognise every step…” interrupts the data report. Separate the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs. Group related results and use concise comparisons so the progression is easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “Academic staff,” “Distance learning,” “availability of journals,” and “reliability of wi-fi,” so the reader can recognise many categories. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, especially the repeated use of “is” and “satisfaction.” Several inaccurate or misspelled forms, such as “libaray,” “cources,” “postgrduate,” and “saisfaction,” make the writing harder to read. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “the percentage of a libaray staff” and “every step csn increase dor other step.” Use precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “the largest group,” and “were very satisfied,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to report figures in simple clauses, and the repeated pattern “X is …%” makes some individual data points understandable. However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, articles, agreement, and punctuation often make the relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, “the five section of the circle and show a percentage” is not a complete, well-formed sentence, and “Academic staff has 7%” uses an unsuitable verb pattern for describing a proportion. Long chains joined by “and” also lack clear sentence boundaries. Practise accurate comparative sentences and use full stops to separate each main point.

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