Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart compare the shares of five major results of university students, as well as how different results are distrubuted.
Overall, the largest proportion of full time undergraduate students in the university is fill-time undergraduate students, while the distance learning, part-time postgraduate, acadmeic staff and full-time post graduate students are other significant proportion. Moreover, the students of full-time undergraduate is responsible for the largest prpottion in the chart.
According to the chart, significant amount of students are full-time undergraduate students.(almost quarter of total chart) and full-time postgraduate students (25%), while part-time postgraduate students have (16%) proportion. the least among results are distnce learning and acadmic staff.
The chart shows that thier is a significant differnce between the results of university students.
On the othe hand, the other chart shows the library opening hours, helpness of staff, availability of books,availability of jornals, and reliabiltity of wifi, for the users and the satisfication of the library users.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies the largest user group and mentions several other categories, but it only minimally reports the information in the visuals. The overview repeats that undergraduates are the largest group and does not summarise the main satisfaction results. The figure for undergraduates is also misreported as “almost quarter”; it is 44%, while 25% applies to full-time postgraduates. The satisfaction table is merely listed in the final paragraph, with no figures or comparisons, so key task information is omitted. To improve, give a concise overview of both visuals, accurately compare the user-group proportions, and report the strongest and weakest satisfaction results—for example, staff helpfulness versus journal availability.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response, including an opening, an overview, and later references to the chart and table. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the overview repeats the claim about undergraduates, the next paragraph revisits group proportions, and the final paragraph introduces the satisfaction table without explaining its results. Connectors such as “Moreover” and “On the other hand” do not establish clear relationships between the points that follow them. The response would be easier to follow if it used one paragraph for the user categories and another for satisfaction, with a clear overview first and comparisons grouped logically.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “full-time undergraduate,” “availability,” and “reliability of wi-fi.” However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the writing less clear, such as “distrubuted,” “acadmeic,” “prpottion,” and “satisfication.” Some expressions are also imprecise or repetitive: “results” is used for user categories, and “significant” is repeated without identifying what is notable. Choose accurate terms such as “categories,” “share,” and “satisfaction ratings,” and check spelling carefully. More precise language would help distinguish the largest group from the highest satisfaction score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts a few longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “The pie chart compare” and “the students … is responsible,” as well as faulty phrasing in “the largest proportion … is fill-time undergraduate students.” The sentence beginning “According to the chart” also has an unclear construction and punctuation around the parenthetical figures. These problems sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to understand. Practise forming accurate comparison sentences, checking singular and plural subjects, and using complete clauses; for example, “Full-time undergraduates account for 44% of users, compared with 25% for full-time postgraduates.”
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