Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie graph and table shows information about the below show the result of a survey of library users at a university. To begin with, the library users categories and library user satisfaction is show a different categories an present the percentage. First categories in library users Full time undergraduate is 44% and library user satisfaction is Availability of journals categories in very satisfied 45%, fairly satisfied 35% and not satisfied 20% percentage is higest. While in the the Academic staff of library value is 7% in the other side library user satisfaction in helpfulness of staff value in very satisfied 95%, fairly satisfied 5% and not satisfied is zero percent. Other categories is full time postgraduate 25% and library opening hour in very satisfied 65%, fairly satisfied 35% and not satisfied is zero percent. third categories is part time postgraduate 16% and other side available of books in very satisfied 50%, fairly satisfied 40% and not satisfied 10%. fourth categories is Distance learning 8% and Reliability of wi-fi in very satisfied 48%, fairly satisfied 33% and not satisfied 19%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures from both visuals, and several are accurate: undergraduates are 44%, academic staff 7%, and staff helpfulness has 95% very satisfied. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns, which is central to summarising the data. Instead, it pairs user categories with unrelated satisfaction measures—for example, linking academic staff to staff helpfulness and full-time postgraduates to opening hours—although the chart and table do not show relationships between these groups and ratings. The statement that journal satisfaction is the “higest” is also unclear as a comparison. To improve, report the largest user group and the strongest and weakest satisfaction results as separate overall features, then select accurate comparisons from each visual.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response attempts to move through the user categories and satisfaction measures, using markers such as “To begin with,” “While,” and “Other categories.” This gives the reader some indication that different points are being introduced. However, the information is not arranged into a clear summary: the category figures are repeatedly joined to unrelated satisfaction rows, so the progression is difficult to follow. There is also no distinct overview or paragraphing to separate the two visuals. For example, the sentence beginning “Other categories is full time postgraduate” shifts abruptly to opening hours. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main patterns, and focused details for the chart and table; use comparisons only where the data supports them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “very satisfied,” “fairly satisfied,” and “reliability of wi-fi,” so the reader can identify the subject and several data categories. However, the range is limited and some word choices or combinations make the meaning difficult to interpret, such as “the library users categories” and “in very satisfied 45%.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “higest,” and repeated use of “categories” where a more precise term is needed. Aim for standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “rated,” and “proportion,” and check the exact labels when describing each measure. More accurate collocations would make the figures easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple clauses and attempts to connect ideas with “while” and “and,” but control of sentence structure is weak. Errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the relationships between the data. For example, “The given pie graph and table shows information about the below show” combines incompatible sentence patterns, while “library user satisfaction is show” has incorrect verb form and agreement. Several long sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the sequence beginning “First categories in library users.” Practise writing one complete sentence for each comparison, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms. A wider range of accurately controlled sentence patterns would make the report clearer.

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