Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

yeah ,i see the chart and i see at the library chart the academic staff around 7% , distance learning around 8%, part time postgraduate around 16%,

full time postgraduate is 25% and full time undergraduate is 44% in this chart almost all people were very satisfied and much are satisfied but for book availability,wifi availablity and availability of journals people are not satisfied in these case this is a good chart for a university library. almost all facilities are good untill we talk about journals,books, wi-fi. there is a good response in helpfullness of staff and this is very good thing . I think university make it better in few days . University need some more book . they find new and professional journals and make sure that there is a good facility of Wi-Fi . This is my thinking for the university and its library and what you think ?

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report the user-category figures accurately, including the largest group, full-time undergraduates at 44%, and the smallest, academic staff at 7%. You also identify staff helpfulness as a strong result and point to weaker satisfaction with books, journals and Wi-Fi. However, the response only partially summarises the task: it gives no clear, organised overview of the main satisfaction patterns, and it does not compare the figures in enough detail. For example, staff helpfulness has 95% very satisfied, while opening hours has 65%; journals have the highest dissatisfaction at 20%. The final recommendations and question to the reader are not required in this report and take space from describing the data. Focus on a concise overview and selected comparisons grounded in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some relevant sequencing: you first list the user categories, then discuss satisfaction and finish with suggestions. However, the response is presented as one long, loosely connected paragraph, so the reader cannot easily distinguish the chart’s two main parts or identify an overview. Repeated links such as “and” and “this is” create a list-like flow, while “in these case” does not clearly connect to a specific set of results. The shift from reporting figures to personal recommendations (“I think university make it better”) also interrupts the report’s progression. Use separate paragraphs for user categories and satisfaction, and organise the latter around the strongest and weakest results, using clear comparisons rather than repeated general statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main subject, including “academic staff,” “full-time undergraduate,” “availability of books” and “Wi-Fi.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “good chart,” “good response” and “people are not satisfied.” Some word forms and spellings also reduce accuracy, including “helpfullness” and “availablity.” In an IELTS report, choose neutral, data-focused language rather than evaluative or conversational wording such as “this is a very good thing” and “what you think?” More precise terms such as “satisfaction,” “dissatisfaction” and “the largest proportion” would help you describe the figures clearly and avoid repeating “good” and “satisfied.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, but control is inconsistent and the sentence structures are mostly simple or run together. For example, “almost all people were very satisfied and much are satisfied but for book availability…” shifts awkwardly between clauses, and “University need some more book” has problems with subject–verb agreement and plural form. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, as seen in the opening “yeah ,i see” and the long sentence beginning “in this chart.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then add controlled comparisons using structures such as “whereas” or “while.” Check agreement, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries when proofreading.

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