Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Categories of library users
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Libraries are widely used by the individuals in all over the world.Individuals often visits library to spend a peaceful Time by reading the subjects they like.
There are a categories of the individuals who visits the library for example, Academic staff, Distance learners, part time postgraduate,full time undergraduate, full time postgraduate and etc.
The point is Majority of Individuals are often learners rather than workers, however learners went library to learn or to read majority of them are satisfied by the staff, library opening hours, availability of books and journals.
However from my preceptive some of individuals are not satisfied by the library.they don't find the books and journals they need, opening hours of the library and the behavior of the staff however every coin had two sides we have both experience available in the place or town individuals life.If I talk about my self I'de love to read fictional stories
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response makes a limited attempt to describe the topic, but it does not adequately summarise the chart and table. It names several user categories and says that most users are learners, which is broadly supported by the data, and it notes general satisfaction with staff and opening hours. However, it gives none of the key percentages and does not identify the largest group (full-time undergraduates, at 44%) or compare satisfaction across the five services. The claim that users are dissatisfied with opening hours and staff behaviour is not supported: no respondents were dissatisfied with opening hours, and only 5% were dissatisfied with staff helpfulness. Personal comments about reading fiction and general statements about libraries do not answer the reporting task. Focus on the visual data and select accurate, representative comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to group ideas: the response first introduces library users, then comments on satisfaction, and finally adds a personal reflection. However, the information does not develop in a clear, logical sequence as a report of the visuals. The transition beginning “However from my preceptive” shifts to unsupported personal opinion, while “every coin had two sides” does not connect the data in a meaningful way. Several ideas are run together, and punctuation and spacing make the progression harder to follow. A clearer structure would use an introduction, an overview of the main patterns, and separate details on user categories and satisfaction. Use linking expressions only when they show a genuine contrast or addition.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses a basic range of vocabulary to discuss libraries and users, including “learners,” “staff,” “opening hours,” and “availability of books and journals.” Some wording is repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “individuals,” “library,” and “satisfied,” and several expressions are imprecise or unsuitable for an academic data summary, such as “every coin had two sides” and “from my preceptive.” There are also word-form and spelling problems, including “visits” where the plural subject requires a different form, and “preceptive” for “perspective.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a more precise vocabulary for reporting proportions and comparisons, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” and “a higher proportion.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing attempts some longer sentences, but control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures remains limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “individuals often visits” and “individuals who visits,” while “There are a categories” has an article and number error. Sentence boundaries are also frequently unclear: the opening runs two sentences together, and the long sentence beginning “However from my preceptive” contains several ideas without effective punctuation. Capitalisation is inconsistent, as in “Time,” and apostrophe use in “I'de” is incorrect. These errors can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses and clear punctuation.
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