Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrate various type of the survey of library utilization at a university. It shows the different catagories of library users.

Overall it is clear that full time undergraduate has highest categiries rather than the others, so the other shows that full time postgraduate has less percentage then the ful time secondry level. In general the academic staff is lowest range in this pie chart.

Describe the big segments that isacademic staff has 7%that is very low percentage rather than others the other that is distance learning in all courses has 8% and this is maximum to the distance learning. After that part time postgraduate has 16% that is higher then the acadimic and and distance.

Describe remaining details is full time undergraduate and postgraduate has highest value that is 25% and 44%. meanwhile, whole pie chart shows the library user satisfaction in percentage.and shoes the difference between the all types.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart as showing library-user categories and correctly report several figures: academic staff at 7%, distance learners at 8%, part-time postgraduates at 16%, and the two largest groups at 44% and 25%. However, the overview is unclear and includes a mistaken comparison: full-time postgraduates are not the smallest group, and the phrase “less percentage then the ful time secondry level” does not identify a meaningful category. More importantly, the response does not summarise the satisfaction table, despite this being a major part of the visual. The final sentence merely says it shows differences, without reporting any satisfaction results. To improve, give a clear overview of both visuals and select key comparisons, such as staff helpfulness being rated very highly and journals receiving the most dissatisfaction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening, an overview, and further details, and phrases such as “Overall” and “After that” signal some progression. However, the sequence is difficult to follow because the overview contains unclear comparisons and the later paragraphs repeat the instruction-like phrase “Describe.” Connections between ideas are often incomplete: “the other shows that” does not clearly identify what is being compared, while the final sentence shifts abruptly to satisfaction without explaining the table. Paragraphing does not yet create a clear progression from the main features to supporting details. Use a concise overview followed by separate, logically ordered paragraphs for user categories and satisfaction, with clear references to each group or measure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “categories,” “percentage,” “academic staff,” and “distance learning,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repetitive expressions make the report less clear. Examples include “highest categiries,” “lowest range,” and “maximum to the distance learning”; these are not natural ways to describe proportions. There are also spelling errors such as “catagories,” “categiries,” and “acadimic,” alongside repeated use of “describe” and “other.” Aim for precise chart language and accurate collocations, such as “accounted for,” “represented,” “the largest share,” and “the smallest proportion.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including “Overall it is clear that…” and “After that part time postgraduate has 16%…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “The pie chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “full time undergraduate has highest categiries” lacks an article and uses an unclear sentence structure. The sentence beginning “Describe the big segments that is…” is especially difficult to parse, with missing punctuation and an incomplete grammatical connection between clauses. Work first on accurate simple sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then combine them using controlled clauses. Check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries when editing.

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