Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE INFORMATION BY SELECTION AND ROPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE CAMPARISIONS THE RELEVENT MORE INFORMATION AND IN THE UPCOMING PAREGHRAPH

FIRST OF ALL THE ACADMIC STAFF THE TOTAL CONFIGURATIN IS SEVEN PERCENT THESE ACDMIC MEMBERS AND TH FORTY FOUR PERCENT THE UNDERGRADUATE STUDENTS USE THIS LIBRARY . IN THIS LIBRARY TOTAL DISTACE LEARNING ALL COURCES EIGHT PERCENT AND THE PART TIME POSTGRADUATE IN SIXTEEN PERCENT AVALIBLE AND FULL TIME POST GRADUATE TOTAL NUMBERS IS TWENTY FIVE PERCENT. STATMENT IS CATEGORIES OF LIBRARY USERS.THE MAIN FEATURE IN THIS UNIVERSITY IN LIBRARY 44% IS THE BIGEST AMOUNT AND LESS THEN 7%.

THE LIBRAY OPNING TIME SIXTY FIVE IS VERY SATISFIED AND FAIRLY SATISFIED HOURS THIRTY FIVE AND NOT SATISFIED ZERO HOURS.

AND HELPFULNESS OF STAFF 95 HOURS .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several correct figures from the user-category chart: undergraduates are 44%, full-time postgraduates 25%, part-time postgraduates 16%, distance learners 8%, and academic staff 7%. You also report the opening-hours satisfaction figures accurately. However, the response covers only part of the task: the satisfaction results for staff helpfulness, books, journals, and Wi-Fi are mostly omitted, and “95 hours” misrepresents the 95% very-satisfied figure. The overview is limited to saying 44% is the biggest and 7% the smallest, without summarising the main satisfaction patterns. The response is also 23 words below the 150-word minimum. Include a concise overview and compare the key satisfaction results to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with user categories and then moving to satisfaction, and phrases such as “FIRST OF ALL” signal a sequence. However, the opening is not a clear introduction, and the ideas are crowded into a long, difficult-to-follow paragraph. The transition from the user categories to the overview (“STATMENT IS CATEGORIES OF LIBRARY USERS”) is unclear, while the final sentence about staff helpfulness is incomplete and does not connect the figure to the satisfaction scale. Use separate paragraphs for the two visuals, with a clear overview before the details. Linking expressions should clarify comparisons rather than simply announce the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “academic staff,” “undergraduate students,” “part-time postgraduate,” and “very satisfied.” However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make the report harder to understand, such as “ropoting,” “camp arisions,” “distace,” and “avalible.” Some expressions are also unnatural or inaccurate: “total configuration” and “95 hours” do not describe the data appropriately. Choose precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “the largest group,” and “95% were very satisfied.” Accurate spelling and natural collocations are important here because the response needs to communicate several categories and satisfaction levels clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Most sentences rely on simple, loosely connected clauses, and grammatical errors frequently make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “the academic staff the total configuration is seven percent these academic members” lacks a clear sentence structure, while “the part time postgraduate in sixteen percent available” does not express the comparison grammatically. The final phrase, “AND HELPFULNESS OF STAFF 95 HOURS,” is a fragment and leaves the meaning incomplete. There is little evidence of controlled complex sentence forms, and punctuation and sentence boundaries are inconsistent. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example: “Academic staff made up 7% of users, compared with 44% for full-time undergraduates.”

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