Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Categories of library users

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The pie chart shows academc staff.The pie chart shows different students of all courses.The

academic staff was lower 7%than Distance Learning.And the Distance Learning of all courses

was 8%which was higher than Part-time postgraduate.And the users of library of

postgraduate which was 16%lower as compares to the Full time postgraduate

students.Overall,the pie chart

shows that full time undergraduate students spent their time in library.And some satisfication

percentages were seen.The hours of Library opening hours 65% were satisfied.And

Helpfulness of staff very satisfied was 95%.And availability of Journals in very satisified level

which were 45% as compared to the Fairly satisfied.Overall,the relaibility of wifi which was

very satisfied 48% as compared to the fairly satisfied 33%."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant figures, including the largest user group (44% full-time undergraduates), the 95% very-satisfied rating for staff helpfulness, and the 48% rating for Wi-Fi reliability. However, the response covers the task only partially: it gives no clear, accurate overview of the main patterns across both visuals, and some comparisons are unclear or incorrect. For example, 16% is the share of part-time postgraduates, not a general postgraduate figure that is lower than the full-time postgraduate share of 25%. The satisfaction data are also selective, with important contrasts such as journals’ 20% not-satisfied rating omitted. The response is 35 words below the required minimum, which limits the detail available. A fuller summary should compare the user categories and highlight the strongest and weakest satisfaction results.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to connect information using words such as “And,” “Overall,” and “as compared to,” and the response moves from user categories to satisfaction results. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough: the opening repeats “The pie chart shows,” then breaks off with “The,” and the discussion shifts between charts without a clear overview or paragraph structure. Several comparisons are difficult to follow, particularly the sentence about postgraduate users and the repeated statements about satisfaction. Organise the response into a brief introduction and overview, followed by one paragraph on user categories and another on satisfaction. Use linking expressions selectively and make clear what each percentage refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “academic staff,” “full-time undergraduate,” “availability,” and “satisfied,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with “pie chart,” “shows,” and “satisfied” used repeatedly. Several inaccurate forms or collocations make the meaning less clear, such as “some satisfication percentages were seen,” “spent their time in library,” and “very satisified level.” Spelling errors such as “academc,” “satisfication,” and “relaibility” also weaken precision. Build a more accurate range for describing proportions and survey ratings, and use standard category labels consistently. This would make the comparisons easier to understand without requiring more complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response relies on short, simple statements, and there is little evidence of controlled sentence variety. Frequent errors in sentence construction and punctuation sometimes obscure the relationships between figures. For example, “The pie chart shows academc staff” is an incomplete statement, while “The hours of Library opening hours 65% were satisfied” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. Comparisons such as “which was 16% lower as compares to” also contain faulty structures, and articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries are inconsistently handled. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Sixty-five per cent of respondents were very satisfied with the library’s opening hours.” Then combine related figures using accurate comparative clauses.

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