Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This line graph illustrates the number of shops that were closed and opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Overall, The number of shops are around 9000 which is the greatest of all time and lowest number is 1000 it shows the data of 8 years of market shops opening and closing.

As this chart not clearly mentioned the indicated lines so we have to judge by our point of view in 2011 the number of shops in market are around about 9000 estimated and it fells down raoidly to 4000 in 2012. That was a huge fall from a peak level then slowly growing it reaches about 6000 in 2014. and continously fluctuating in upcoming years and reached 3000 in 2018.

While shops closure was more than 000 in 2011 and reaches to 7000 in 2012. Fell from a great level to near about a zero level in 2015. and rise up again in 2016 and then become stable until 2018.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the graph’s subject and mention several broad movements, including the sharp fall in one series in 2015 and its recovery in 2016. However, the overview is not an accurate summary: “around 9000” and “lowest number is 1000” do not describe the overall pattern, and the series are not clearly distinguished. Several figures and years are misreported. For example, openings begin at about 8,500, fall to 3,900 in 2012, and end at 3,000; closures peak at about 7,200 in 2013, not 7,000 in 2012, and fall to about 600 in 2015. The claim that the lines are unclear does not replace reporting them. Select the main contrasts and describe each series accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an attempted overview, and separate paragraphs for the two series, so there is some basic organisation. The sequence is generally chronological, and “Overall” and “While” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview does not establish which line is being described, and the later paragraphs do not consistently name openings or closures. Some sentences are fragments, such as “Fell from a great level to near about a zero level in 2015,” while the final paragraph combines several changes without clear links. Use one paragraph to summarise the main trends, then group the detailed comparisons by series, with clear references and complete sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant graph vocabulary, including “fluctuating,” “peak level,” “stable,” and “fall,” which helps communicate changes over time. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward for describing data. “The number of shops are around 9000” is vague and does not identify openings or closures; “fells down raoidly” and “near about a zero level” are also imprecise. Spelling errors such as “rao idly” (written as “raoidly”) and “continously” reduce clarity. Aim for precise verbs and collocations such as “declined sharply,” “recovered,” and “remained relatively stable,” and use “approximately” rather than repeated informal approximations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to use time clauses and linking structures, but sentence control is inconsistent and errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The number of shops are” has subject–verb disagreement, and “in 2011 the number of shops in market are around about 9000 estimated” has problems with tense, articles, and sentence structure. Several statements are fragments, including “Fell from a great level…” and “and reached 3000 in 2018.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “Overall, The” and the lower-case sentence beginning “and continously.” Practise complete past-tense sentences with a clear subject for each series, and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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