Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given line chart illustrates that how many shops are being newly opened and how many shuts in a country during the period betweeb 2011 to 2018.

Overall, it is quite clear that there is a declining trend ib both the aspect of shops but there is huge blow in openng the sops in 2015 than rose again and keeps the moderate trend while closure of shops has a dip in 2012 than a slight rise till 2014 and mentain itself till 2017 and ends in slight decline in 2018.

Firstly, the shop opening in 2011 starts almost at 6500 shop than drops to 6000 after that rose to almost 7100. Next to that having a slight decline it reachedalmost the bottom in 2015 by the nubers approxmately just 500 then recovered and get the nubers almost 5100 and ended up the same in 2018.

The closureof the shops starts high in 2011 with the figures almost 8500 which next year droped to 4500 than contineously rose and reached 6100 in 2014 than dropped to 4000 in 2015 and almost remain same for next two years than slided down to 3000 in 2018.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for both shop openings and closures. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesizing the information effectively. The overview is present but could be more precise; for instance, describing the trends as 'declining' is a bit of an oversimplification given the fluctuations shown. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of clear, comparative analysis between the two categories (e.g., noting when closures exceeded openings) limits the depth of the response. The data reporting is generally accurate, though some figures are slightly imprecise.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the two categories. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Next to that', and 'Overall', but they are sometimes used mechanically or with awkward phrasing. The progression of ideas is generally clear, though the transition between sentences within paragraphs can feel disjointed due to grammatical errors. Referencing is mostly clear, but the flow is occasionally interrupted by the repetitive structure of the sentences, which impacts the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'betweeb', 'openng', 'sops', 'mentain', 'nubers', 'contineously', 'slided') that, while not always impeding communication, are distracting and indicate a lack of control. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic verbs like 'starts', 'drops', and 'rose'. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'stabilized', or 'a significant downturn'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('how many shops are being newly opened and how many shuts'), subject-verb agreement errors, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and sentence boundaries. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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