Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The gragh describe the the number of shops that closed and open in a country.

Overall, the graph illustrates number of shops opened and closed in one country and the number of new shops is much higher about 7000 in 2013 and smallest number is 800 in 2015 and closer shops are 8500 in 2011.

The list of shops are explained that in 2011 the new shops are aproximately 9000 and this decreases in 2012 and reached at 4000 and then this rate reached at above 8000 in 2013 and in 2015 this list went to below at 4000 and for some years this remain constant and then at last this reached at 3000 in 2018.

The number of closing shops goes up in 2013 and this about 8000 and then this range went at ground and this is 700 in 2015 and this is the most lowest point of shops. then this hit the 5000 shops in 2016 and then this list remain constable for two years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for shop openings and closures. However, the data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that openings reached 7000 in 2013 and 800 in 2015 is not clearly supported by the visual data. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the description of the trends is somewhat disjointed. To improve, ensure that the figures cited accurately reflect the graph and focus on identifying the most significant trends (e.g., the peak in 2013 and the decline thereafter) rather than listing every year in a repetitive manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often mechanical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes awkward, such as the frequent use of 'and then' to connect sentences. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping the data by trend rather than just listing years.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'number', 'shops', and 'reached'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'list of shops' instead of 'data' or 'trends', and 'constable' instead of 'constant'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'stabilized', or 'peaked', and ensure that nouns are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The gragh describe', 'shops are explained'), tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple and lack the complexity needed for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are several spelling errors, such as 'gragh' and 'aproximately'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors impacts the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your work.

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