Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In 2011 six thousand above shopes open they reach very high after two years. Suddenly with due some reasons they close in 2015. After one year they establish new features and demands were increased. 2017 these shopsreach were low and in 2018 approximately high.
In 2011 Eight thosands above shops were open and 4000 closed in 2012. After that 6000 shops were open in 2014.
Similarly these ups and downs were continued till 2017 and 4000 thousands new shops opens in 2017. In 2018
they introduce new features and update their shops and increasingly 3000 shops were opens.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 98 words. This significantly impacts the ability to provide a full overview or report on the main features of the graph. The summary is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the trends. The data provided is often inaccurate or confusingly presented, such as the claim that 'six thousand above shopes open' in 2011. Because the response is significantly under-length and fails to adequately select and report the main features or make meaningful comparisons, it does not address the task requirements sufficiently.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disjointed and difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text feel like a series of disconnected statements. The referencing is unclear, and the overall structure does not guide the reader through the data effectively. The lack of a clear introduction or summary further hinders the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'open', 'close', and 'high'. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'shopes' (spelling), 'thosands' (spelling), and 'increasingly 3000 shops were opens' (incorrect grammar/collocation). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data points accurately. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing statistical data, which limits the ability to convey information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many sentences being fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'Suddenly with due some reasons they close in 2015.' Verb tense usage is inconsistent and often incorrect, and there are frequent errors in pluralization and subject-verb agreement. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further detracts from the clarity of the writing.
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