Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This daigram present the data 0f the time period 2011 - 2018 where the number of shop are closed and the new shops are open in country during these years.

In 2012 the number of shops 9000 are close and remaing 3000 in 2018 due too many shops are opened in these time period.where the 500 to 6500 shops are new opened in 4 years.

so that in 2012 the shop ratio dcrease the number of 9000 to 4000 in the next year the increase to 5000 after next year the also increase the ratio on 6000,at the same point here and same year thr ratio of shops opend and closed are in same year.

in this graph illustrate that different time duration in different yeras many shops are opened and many shops are closed. s the country progress is in balance

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is largely inaccurate and fails to clearly report the main features of the graph. The data interpretation is confusing; for instance, the mention of '9000' and '3000' does not clearly align with the visual data provided. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two categories (closures and openings). The summary is underdeveloped and does not provide a coherent picture of the trends over the 2011–2018 period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the sentences are disjointed, making it difficult to follow the writer's intent. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly (e.g., 'so that', 'where the'), which hinders the flow of information. The lack of clear transitions between the years and the categories makes the report feel like a collection of isolated, confusing statements rather than a cohesive summary of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'shops', 'opened', and 'closed'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'daigram' instead of 'diagram' and 'dcrease' instead of 'decrease'. The writer struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. The limited range of vocabulary prevents the writer from conveying the information with any degree of accuracy or sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'number of shop are closed'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, lacking proper punctuation. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. The persistent errors in basic grammar, such as 'the ratio of shops opend and closed are in same year', make the text difficult to parse and understand.

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