Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph shows that the number of shops clouser and opening in one country between 2011 and 2018. The shop clouser means shop is off in this country due to many problem . The shop open means shop is in this country is ready for customers . In the graph first shown the number of clousers shop in the country is very down . Because the shop keepers open the shop on goverment order . Goverment order the shop will be closed for the cuontry war to save the people form the war . The rate of shop closed is 6500 to 5000 between 2011 and 2018. The number of shop open in this country is good as campered to number of closed shop . This number shows that this country is development country . As campered to closed shop the rate of open shop is greater . The rate of shop open is 8700 to 3000 between 2011 and 2018.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the graph. Instead of describing the trends in shop closures and openings, the student invents an external narrative about war and government orders, which is not supported by the prompt. While the response mentions some figures, the interpretation is largely inaccurate and does not address the main features of the graph. The task requires a factual summary of the provided data, not an imaginative explanation. Consequently, the response does not meet the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. It is written as a single block of text without clear paragraphing. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, making the progression of information disjointed. The sentences are repetitive in structure, and the relationship between the ideas is often unclear. The lack of a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs makes the response difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'clouser' for 'closure', 'cuontry' for 'country', and 'campered' for 'compared'. The word choice is basic and often inappropriate for an academic report, such as using 'very down' to describe a trend. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, which significantly hinders communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as 'The graph shows that the number of shops clouser and opening...', which lacks a main verb. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing and misuse of periods. The errors are pervasive and make the text difficult to read.
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