Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph gives the information about shops. The graph shows the number of markets that closed and the number of new shops that opened in a country among the years 2011 and 2018.

overall, First of all the picture shows closed markets in a country. First in 2011 the shops closed is 8500 and opened rate is 6500. Second in 2012 the shops had closed rate is 4000 and the opened rate is 6000. Third in 2013 the market closed rate is 5000and the shops opened is 7100. After that year in 2014 the closed rate is 5000 and the opend rate is 6500. In 2015 the market closed about 4000 and the opened rate is 500. In 2016 the market closed is 4000 shops and the shops opened 5100. In 2017 the shops closed rate is 4100 and the opened rate is 5000. Ant the last year 2018 closed rate had 3000 and the shops opend rate is 5100.

In conculsion, the information is written about shops opened and closed rate in one country between 2011 and 2018. So, first closed rate was highest is 8500 and the end highest rate is shops opened is 5100.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a meaningful summary of the main features or trends. Instead of reporting key data points and making comparisons, the student provides a repetitive, year-by-year list of figures. This approach lacks the analytical overview required for an Academic Task 1 response. The 'overall' section is poorly integrated and does not highlight the significant trends, such as the general decline in closures or the fluctuations in openings. The data is presented mechanically, and the lack of synthesis prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on 'First', 'Second', 'Third', and 'After that year'. This creates a list-like effect rather than a cohesive report. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the introduction, the body, and the conclusion is abrupt. The conclusion does not effectively summarise the information but rather repeats specific data points, which does not contribute to a logical progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student frequently uses the same phrases, such as 'shops closed rate' and 'opened rate', throughout the text. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'remained stable', 'peaked'). Spelling errors, such as 'opend' and 'conculsion', are present. The range is just sufficient to convey the basic information, but it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies on simple sentence structures, which are often grammatically incorrect. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'the shops closed is 8500' and 'the market closed rate is 5000'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after numbers and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors and the lack of complex structures limit the score. The student needs to focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors.

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