Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided line graph illustrates the digits of shops that are opened and closed in same country 2011 to 2018. overall, dotted line represent as opening ratio and plane line shown as consider as closing shops .

at the beginning point the opening shops around about 8500 but fluctuation are seemed . after four quadrants the numbers of opening shops are stable by surpassing the closed shops . similarly, closed shops are steeply decreased in numbers .At the last point both opening ratio is decrease and is inversely proportion to the closed one's. throughout the frame the numbers of closed shop is more than the opened shops . both the lines are totally opposite to each others even in one country furthermore, during 2011 to 2018 plane line are significantly declined . but at the end ratio increase gradually.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the description is often inaccurate or confusing, such as stating that 'throughout the frame the numbers of closed shop is more than the opened shops', which contradicts the visual data. The overview is poorly defined and lacks a clear summary of the main features. To improve, ensure you accurately report the data points and provide a clear, concise summary of the overall trends observed in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. It is written as a single, dense paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of effective cohesive devices to link ideas; transitions are either missing or used incorrectly, such as 'furthermore' and 'similarly'. The progression of information is disjointed, and the lack of paragraphing makes the response feel unorganized. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate your introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and use linking words like 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', or 'subsequently' to guide the reader through your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often misused. Phrases like 'digits of shops' instead of 'number of shops' and 'opening ratio' are inappropriate in this context. There is also a reliance on repetitive and imprecise language, such as 'at the beginning point' and 'at the last point'. The word choice often obscures the meaning of the data. To improve, focus on using precise terminology for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'declined', and 'surpassed'. Avoid using informal or non-standard phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede communication. Examples include 'dotted line represent as opening ratio' (subject-verb agreement), 'fluctuation are seemed' (passive voice error), and 'inversely proportion' (incorrect word form). The sentence structures are mostly simple and often contain errors in punctuation and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Practice writing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions like 'while' or 'although' to describe the trends more accurately.

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