Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Line Graph illustrated here it indicates that numbers of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
In the 2011, 8,500 Shopes has been opened with that in same year 6,500 on the line of shut down. In the 2012 opening of shopes slighty slow as other hand number of closing shopes are steadily go down.
In between the year of 2012-14 the number of closing shopes keep on scale of up and down where the in same years the scale of opening shopes rapidly rose up from 4,000 i to 7,000 . The mass change has to seen in 2015 from the scale of 6,500 from last year rapidly fall down to 1,000 and on where in 2016 again on track for next continue 3 years its sligt up n down.
Number of opened shopes rose modertely in next 5 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the graph, but the information is often inaccurate or poorly described. For instance, the description of the 2015 data as a 'mass change' falling to 1,000 is confusing and does not clearly reflect the trends shown in the graph. While the response covers the period, the lack of clarity in reporting the figures and the failure to provide a clear overview or meaningful comparisons between the two categories (closures vs. openings) limit the effectiveness of the report. The response addresses the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'on the line of shut down' or 'on where in 2016'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the timeline of events. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related ideas, as the transition between years and trends feels disjointed. The overall structure lacks the flow necessary to guide the reader through the data effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'shopes' instead of 'shops' and 'sligt' instead of 'slight'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends with precision; phrases like 'keep on scale of up and down' are non-standard and imprecise. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequent errors and the reliance on basic, repetitive phrasing prevent the response from demonstrating a wider range of lexical items appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('8,500 Shopes has been opened'), tense usage ('The Line Graph illustrated here it indicates'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as 'In the 2011, 8,500 Shopes has been opened with that in same year 6,500 on the line of shut down.' The range of structures is limited, and the errors are persistent throughout the text, which significantly affects the clarity of the report.
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