Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the graph describe the difference between the newly open shops and the cloed shops. in the 2011 the shows the moe numbers of open shops rather than the closed shops. but on the next year there is a huge difference in the with the decrease value of ipen shops. by the passing of time there was almost same range of number shows about the closed and open shops in the year 2014. after one year 4000 new shops open ith the less number of closed shops. in 2016 the new open shops was 5000 and the closed shops was 4000 . its means by the passing of time there was more range open shops then the closed shops. in the conclusion e can say that the bar graph shows that the market expand day by day . with the increment of peope also increase the needs of bassic things day by day.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by describing parts of the line graph regarding shop closures and openings between 2011 and 2018. However, the response falls short of fully reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons effectively. Several data points are misread or inaccurately stated (for example, stating that in 2016 new open shops were 5,000 and closed shops were 4,000, whereas the data shows closures at 5,200 and openings at 4,000). The overview provided at the end is overly simplistic and relies on personal opinion about market expansion rather than a proper summary of visual trends. Furthermore, the confusion between a line graph and a bar term ('bar graph') shows a lack of precise task awareness. Overall, the response achieves a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks proper paragraphing, written entirely as a single dense block of text, which significantly hinders readability and logical progression. While basic temporal markers like 'in the 2011', 'on the next year', and 'after one year' are used, they are mechanical and often inaccurate in their prepositional usage. There is no clear overall progression or structured overview, and referencing between ideas is frequently unclear (e.g., 'its means by the passing of time...'). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a choppy and disjointed reading experience. This aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 due to some discernible flow of time.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and basic, with frequent word-choice and spelling errors ('cloed' instead of closed, 'moe' for more, 'ipen' for open, 'peope' instead of people, 'bassic' for basic). The student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'market expand', but these are hindered by awkward collocations and grammatical inaccuracies. Less common lexical items are absent, and repetition of basic terms ('open shops', 'closed shops') is widespread. The lexical range is minimally adequate to convey a rudimentary topic, but the high frequency of errors places it firmly at Band 4.5, rounded up to 5.0 for basic task coverage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is an absence of complex structures, and simple sentences are frequently marred by basic errors in word form, tense, and article usage (e.g., 'the shows the moe numbers', 'in the with the decrease value', '4000 new shops open ith the less number'). Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected, and sentence boundaries are blurred. Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, matching the core descriptors for Band 4.0.

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