Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given chart depicts the different kinds of shops that are opened and closed in one county from different years.
We see that fluctuations occured in opening and closyof shoos in different years.This range started from 6300 and reaches 8800 ,with decline and increase in opening and closing time .About 8800 shops remains open and this figure declines to 4000 with an increase again to 6100 and then gradually to 4000.This practice is observed to about 2016 .Then decline occured in opening of shop in 2018.
Similarly the shop remained close to about
5900 with sudden increase in tendency then agian low in numbers.Majority of shops remains close in about 2015 at night.
If a comparison is made we see that majority of shops remained open in day time in different countries but remained close in night time .But in most countries the tendency to open shop was hogher .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.5
The student attempts to address the task by describing a graph about shop closures and openings, but fundamental misinterpretations severely undermine the response. The text incorrectly claims the data refers to shops opening and closing 'in day time' and 'in night time', showing a complete misunderstanding of the actual line graph provided (which measures annual figures from 2011 to 2018). Furthermore, the figures reported (such as '6300', '8800', and '4000') are largely inaccurate or disconnected from the actual data points on the chart. There is no clear overview, and the main features of the trends are not properly identified or compared. This falls well short of the requirements for Task 1, earning a band score of 3.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression throughout. The response is presented in a dense, poorly structured block of text with inadequate paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed sentences that make the text difficult to follow. References between sentences are frequently unclear, particularly due to abrupt shifts in ideas about timeframes and numbers. For instance, transitions like 'This practice is observed to about 2016' fail to connect smoothly to the preceding or following statements. Overall, the structural flaws and lack of coherent progression warrant a band score of 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inappropriate for an academic report. Words such as 'kinds', 'practice', and 'tendency' are misused in this context. There are also numerous spelling and word-form errors, such as 'occured' and 'closyof shoos'. The student struggles to report basic statistical trends using appropriate vocabulary (e.g., using 'night time' and 'day time' entirely incorrectly). Because the lexical range is severely limited and contains frequent errors that strain the reader's understanding, the vocabulary warrants a band score of 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures that are frequently marred by basic errors. There are numerous mistakes in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'shops that are opened', 'fluctuations occured', and 'shop remained close to about 5900 with sudden increase in tendency then agian low in numbers'. Punctuation is also faulty, with missing spaces after periods and awkward comma splices. Because errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning, the grammatical accuracy reflects a band score of 4.0.
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