Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows the information about how much shops were closed and opend in significant country during 2011 to 2018.
Overall, the number of shops that closed represents its highest point in the start of period and after that show a downward trend over the period while shope that opened started with fluctuation and then drop sharply after the half of year and then it increasd and maintain its range.
First of all the shops that closed, started their number from over 6000 and continue its down trend and reached at 1000 an then it shows a sharp incriment in its number of shops and reached at over 5000.
Second of all, the number of shops that are new opened, that begins from under 9000 and continue with fluctuation and then go down rapidly and reached at just 3000.
During this specific period, the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country show the bearish trend with fluctation from 2011 to 2018.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, providing an overview and mentioning various movements in shop closures and openings. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reading and reporting. For instance, the student states that closures 'reached at 1000' (the actual low was around 600 in 2015) and that new openings 'begins from under 9000' and went down to 'just 3000' (openings started at 8,500 in 2011). The overview is vague and contains inaccurate summaries of the trends. Because of these noticeable misinterpretations and lack of precise data representation, the response falls into the Band 5 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitional markers such as 'First of all' and 'Second of all'. Cohesive devices are mechanically applied, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as pronoun use and ambiguous time references ('after the half of year'). Paragraphing is present, but overall the organization lacks smooth flow and clear logical progression, aligning closely with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'shops', 'closed', 'opened', and 'number'. There are several word choice and collocation errors, such as 'how much shops were closed and opend' and 'incriment'. Less common lexical items are either absent or used incorrectly ('bearish trend', 'fluctation'). Spelling mistakes ('opend', 'shope', 'increasd', 'incriment', 'fluctation') are noticeable and detract from the reading experience, though they rarely impede overall communication entirely, placing this at a Band 5 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple and flawed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('represents', 'show', 'started', 'is new opened'), missing articles, and awkward preposition use ('at the start of period', 'in one country'). Clauses are frequently strung together with coordinating conjunctions rather than controlled subordination. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect the Band 5 criteria.
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