Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph compares the number of shop closures and opening between 2011and 2018.
Overall it is clear that numbers of shops that closed and new shops that open in one country highest closed shops in 2013 and lowest closed shops in 2018.It is also noticeable that highest opened shops in 2013 and lowest opened shop in 2015.
Looking fast at in one country number of shop closed highest in number at 2011. almost 9000 shops are closed in 2011. then 2012 the clothes shops number disgraced almost 3000 and the shops closed 4000.compare with around 2011 opened shops number up to 6000.in 2013 the opened shops disgrace 6000.
The figure for the lowest number of closed shops 2018 its 3000. The opened lowest number of shops 2015 lower than 1000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 131 words, which negatively impacts task achievement. Furthermore, the selection and reporting of main features is problematic. The student attempts to provide an overview and summarize the data, but the descriptions of specific figures are frequently inaccurate and confused when compared against the visual data. For instance, the student states that the highest closed shops were in 2013 and lowest in 2018, which partially aligns with the data, but claims 'almost 9000 shops are closed in 2011' and makes erratic statements about 2012 and 2013 values. The numbers cited often contradict the actual graph or are garbled, showing a weak ability to accurately select and report main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is structured into short paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body details. However, the logical progression is severely disrupted by poor sentence structure, missing transitions, and abrupt shifts between ideas. For example, the transition 'Looking fast at in one country number of shop closed...' is ungrammatical and fails to guide the reader logically through the details. Paragraphing is rudimentary, with several single-sentence or very short paragraphs that lack internal cohesion. Furthermore, cohesive devices are almost entirely absent or misused, resulting in a disjointed text where referencing is frequently unclear.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words from the prompt such as 'shop', 'closed', 'opened', 'number', and 'country'. There are numerous word-form errors, such as 'opening' instead of 'openings', 'closed shops' versus 'clothes shops', and 'disgrace' instead of 'decrease'. These lexical inaccuracies and limited range restrict the precision of the descriptions. While the topic is basic enough that the reader can guess the general subject matter, the vocabulary resource falls squarely within the Band 4 descriptors due to the lack of sufficient variety and frequent word-choice errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are frequently incomplete or structurally broken. There is a complete lack of accurate complex structures. Numerous serious grammatical errors impede communication, such as missing verbs ('Overall it is clear that numbers of shops...', 'the opened lowest number of shops 2015 lower than 1000'), incorrect prepositions, and severe tense/word-form confusion ('disgrace' used for decrease). Punctuation is also erratic, with missing spaces after periods and comma splices. These errors occur throughout the text and frequently distort meaning.
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