Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011– 2018

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph is illustrate the one country data betwen since 2011 to 2018 how many shops are closed or how many are opened in which year

Graph shows the minimum shops has been opened in 2015 which is less than 1000 and amximum shops has been opened in 2013 which is more than 7000 this is the most important information in this chart in the graph shows data of 2014 the number of shops opened or closed is not big difference its nearly more than 6000 and less than 6500 the number of both sitution has been almost same not a big diffenrence in this graph also shows the differrence between 2011 and 2018 in 2011 the number of shop opened is more than 6000 and number shop closed is more than 8000 but in 2018 the number of shop opened is nearly and more than 5000 but the number of closed shop is 3000 which is a big differrence between 2011 and 2018 this shows the in 2018 is the number of closed and opened is less than 2011 data

these all graph shows the differrence between the all years of data how many shops are closed or opened or in which year

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the general subject and attempts to compare years, but it reports several central figures inaccurately, which limits how well it fulfils the task. For example, it says the maximum number of shops opened was in 2013 at over 7,000; the chart shows openings peaked in 2011 at about 8,500. It also describes fewer than 1,000 shops opening in 2015, when that low figure belongs to closures. The 2011 and 2018 figures are also reversed or mislabelled. There is no reliable overview of the main trends, such as the sharp fall in closures in 2015 and the overall decline in openings. Select the key patterns first, then check each figure against its series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response makes some attempt to group information by year and uses basic links such as “also” and “but.” However, ideas are not arranged into clear stages, and the long, largely unpunctuated passage makes comparisons difficult to follow. The opening repeats the task rather than establishing an overview, while the final sentence restates that the graph shows differences without adding a clear conclusion. References such as “this” and “these all graph” are also unclear. Organise the report into an introduction, a brief overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the main figures or trends. Use linking words to show precise contrasts, rather than joining many points in one sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on “number,” “difference,” “graph,” and “shops.” Some task-related terms, including “opened,” “closed,” and “data,” help communicate the topic, but several expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “both sitution” and “the number of closed and opened.” Spelling errors, including “betwen,” “amximum,” and “differrence,” also reduce clarity and control. Build a small set of accurate chart-description phrases and use them consistently—for example, “shop openings,” “shop closures,” “rose,” “fell sharply,” and “remained relatively stable.” This would make comparisons more precise without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to form longer sentences and make comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often make the relationships between figures unclear. The opening, “The graph is illustrate,” has an incorrect verb construction; “how many shops are closed or how many are opened in which year” also shows difficulty forming an indirect question. Agreement and article use are problematic in phrases such as “the minimum shops has been opened,” and tense and sentence boundaries are not controlled consistently. Most ideas are joined into a single run-on passage with little punctuation. Practise accurate simple past forms for completed chart data, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while” or “whereas.” Clear sentence boundaries will help readers understand each comparison.

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