Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most individuals claim that elementary schools concentrate too much on formal learning. This would make good hobbies, deciplines, and also they learn basic skills very strongly in their primary school. Majority of advantages are availabe on formal education from my perspective i strongly agree from this statement.

Primary academics teach very practical for better understand for the primary children.Tutors use some objects such as toys, colour pencils, drawings, and their body languages to understand properly. Additionally, primary age is the right time to learn creativity for them because, they have more time to do some activities to enhance their creativity skills.This should take more hours in a class period. All these beneficial things happen on formal learning. For example, if an academic staff does teach creativity skills for primary school learners in their classroom they can showcase with other learners at that moment.This would make interaction in their classroom.

However, student want to enhance good habits at that age is the right time to learn with other people such as school friends, principals, tutors, working staffs, sanitary workers of school.

These types of members primary school pupils should get new experiences. Additionally, they observe good qualities of each person, even though they growup in the future they don't have enough time spend with others because all institute staffs don't spent enought time with secondary pupils. For an instance, a student wants to good decipline person in his future he has been following the tutors advice since primary school period. This make him very better in his future.

In conclusion, primary school is the best life lessons, and also some positive vibrations begin for all the elementary kids. In addition, at that period tutors are very kind with students. They would ask any questions without hesitation with their class teachers. For these kinds of career growth of a student makes good personality in their future lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“I strongly agree”—and discuss formal learning, creativity, good habits, and interaction, so the response is relevant to the topic. However, the task asks both whether schools focus too much on formal learning and how important play is alongside learning. Your answer does not clearly explain whether the current balance is excessive, and play itself receives little direct discussion; toys and activities are mentioned mainly as teaching tools. Several claims, such as children having more time to develop creativity, are not fully explained or supported with a clear example. To strengthen the response, address both questions explicitly, explain the role of play in learning and wellbeing, and develop each main point with a specific example and reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group ideas about teaching methods and habits. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is difficult to follow because several sentences contain loosely connected points, and the relationship between formal learning, play, and the stated position is not consistently clear. Connectors such as “Additionally,” “However,” and “In addition” are used, but they do not always show a precise relationship between ideas. References such as “These types of members” and “This make him” are also unclear or awkward. Use a clearer plan—one paragraph on the balance of formal learning and play, another on play’s benefits—and link each example directly to its main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “formal learning,” “creativity,” “interaction,” “good habits,” and “primary school pupils.” These choices show some ability to discuss education, but the usable range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “good hobbies,” “positive vibrations,” and “career growth” do not express the intended educational ideas naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “deciplines,” “availabe,” and “growup.” Aim for precise, familiar academic phrases rather than unusual wording, and check spelling carefully. Building vocabulary around play-based learning, social development, and classroom balance would help you express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use subordinate clauses, for example, “because they have more time to do some activities,” and “even though they growup in the future…”. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, and articles occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to follow. Examples include “Majority of advantages are availabe,” “a student wants to good decipline person,” and “This make him very better.” Some sentences also lack clear grammatical connections between clauses. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “while,” and “which.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb patterns when revising.

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