Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is widely argued that primary schools pay huge attention on the basic learning of the students. While, some people say that their main purpose to go to schools is to learn, I believe that physical health is also very essential for them.

On one hand, we cannot deny the perks of learning in primary schools because that is the time when students grow, understand the things, build their analytical and critical thinking and learns class participation. Moreover, finishing the classwork or homework creates a sense of responsibility in them. Moreover, a strong base of concepts in literature, general knowledge, science, and mathematics will assist them in their college and university life. For example, I have seen many students struggling in their higher education due to poor conceptual knowledge of basic subjects particularly mathematics.

On the other hand, too much pressure of studies will effect their mental health and they will start taking studies as burden. There should b some very interesting activities related to their studies in direct or indirect ways which can boost their brain, logical thinking and analysis. They will be keen to learn new things through various games rather than just following the coursework books. Most of the kids don't want to go to school when they wake up in the morning due to their routine. Thinking about such activities will excite them and they will be more happy to go. In addition to this, along-with learning how to make new friends their communication skills will also improve and they will practice teamwork, discipline, unity and time management. Hence, in my opinion, healthy sports and activities are equally important as other subjects.

In conclusion, instead of just focusing one way, i.e. formal learning, practical implementation of the subjects in the form of a variety of activities and co-curricular games will create a balance and productivity among children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the extent of agreement regarding formal learning and the importance of play. The position is clear from the introduction and maintained throughout. Ideas are relevant, such as the mention of analytical thinking and the social benefits of play. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat general. For instance, while you mention that 'too much pressure' affects mental health, this could be supported with more specific examples or a deeper explanation of how play specifically mitigates this. The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, ensuring all parts of the task are covered.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two sides of the argument. Cohesive devices such as 'On one hand', 'Moreover', and 'In addition to this' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there is a minor issue with the opening sentence structure ('While, some people say...'), where the comma usage is incorrect. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the logical flow is maintained throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'analytical and critical thinking', 'conceptual knowledge', and 'practical implementation'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'pay huge attention on' (should be 'pay close attention to') and 'effect their mental health' (should be 'affect'). While you attempt to use some less common vocabulary, these occasional inaccuracies prevent a higher score. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'learns class participation' (subject-verb agreement), 'There should b' (spelling), and 'along-with learning how to make new friends their communication skills will also improve' (dangling modifier/punctuation). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid confusion.

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