Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is widely argued that primary schools pay huge attention on the basic learning of the students. While, some people say that their main purpose to go to schools is to learn, I believe that physical health is also very essential for them.

On one hand, we cannot deny the perks of learning in primary schools because that is the time when students grow, understand the things, build their analytical and critical thinking and learns class participation. Moreover, finishing the classwork or homework creates a sense of responsibility in them. Moreover, a strong base of concepts in literature, general knowledge, science, and mathematics will assist them in their college and university life. For example, I have seen many students struggling in their higher education due to poor conceptual knowledge of basic subjects particularly mathematics.

On the other hand, too much pressure of studies will effect their mental health and they will start taking studies as burden. There should b some very interesting activities related to their studies in direct or indirect ways which can boost their brain, logical thinking and analysis. They will be keen to learn new things through various games rather than just following the coursework books. Most of the kids don't want to go to school when they wake up in the morning due to their routine. Thinking about such activities will excite them and they will be more happy to go. In addition to this, along-with learning how to make new friends their communication skills will also improve and they will practice teamwork, discipline, unity and time management. Hence, in my opinion, healthy sports and activities are equally important as other subjects.

In conclusion, instead of just focusing one way, i.e. formal learning, practical implementation of the subjects in the form of a variety of activities and co-curricular games will create a balance and productivity among children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the extent of agreement regarding formal learning and the importance of play. The position is clear throughout, and the ideas are relevant. However, the development is somewhat uneven. While the benefits of formal learning are mentioned, the argument for play could be more deeply explored with more specific examples beyond general statements about 'games' and 'activities'. The conclusion effectively synthesizes the two sides, but the overall depth of analysis is more consistent with a Band 6.5 or 7.0 level, as some points are stated rather than fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'On one hand', 'Moreover', 'In addition to this', and 'In conclusion' helps guide the reader through the argument. However, some transitions are slightly repetitive, and the referencing is occasionally mechanical. For instance, the use of 'Moreover' twice in the second paragraph is a minor stylistic weakness. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and the progression of ideas from the importance of formal education to the necessity of play is logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'analytical', 'critical thinking', and 'practical implementation'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'pay huge attention on' (should be 'pay huge attention to') and 'effect their mental health' (should be 'affect'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the score to a 6.0, as the range is sufficient but not consistently precise or sophisticated.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'their main purpose to go to schools is to learn' (awkward phrasing), 'learns class participation' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'There should b' (spelling error). Additionally, 'along-with' is used incorrectly as a prepositional phrase. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. A greater variety of error-free complex structures would be required for a higher score.

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