Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Me and my friend go to a morning walk and discuss about the school learning system . My friend ask me the primary school are not focus on child mental condition . The school ask child to focus on your studies who given by the school .

First of all, the parents admit her child in school for he know about the world and he meet from different child in this way the child mental health good and strong . I really agree with your opinion . But the school are not give child about formal education . The school teacher ask child to learn about your books .

Second of all, the child learn formal education from play grounds and their home . The best source of the formal learning of her child parents and her madrisa teacher . The children were going for play in playingrounds with her friends and the other childs . But some time he can't make his design on a time . Some child learn about the leason who asigned by the teacher those who to in his class but not in his life

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response struggles to address the prompt effectively. While it touches on the topic of primary school education, the argument is fragmented and lacks a clear, consistent position. The ideas are underdeveloped and often confusing, such as the discussion about 'madrisa' teachers or the incoherent ending. The response fails to provide a structured argument regarding the balance between formal learning and play. The content is largely anecdotal and lacks the analytical depth required for an Academic Task 2 essay. The final paragraph contains significant irrelevant text that does not contribute to the task requirements, indicating a failure to maintain a formal academic tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak. The use of cohesive devices is either absent or misused, making it difficult to follow the writer's train of thought. For example, the transition 'Second of all' does not lead to a coherent point. Referencing is often unclear, with pronouns like 'he' or 'it' lacking clear antecedents. The final paragraph is particularly problematic, as it descends into incoherent strings of letters, which completely disrupts the flow and coherence of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic words and struggles to express complex ideas accurately. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'admit her child in school' instead of 'enroll their child in school' and 'mental condition' instead of 'mental well-being'. The use of non-standard terms like 'madrisa' and the inclusion of nonsensical character strings at the end of the essay demonstrate a lack of control over vocabulary and spelling. The range is insufficient to convey precise meaning in an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, including subject-verb agreement ('the school are not give'), tense usage, and article usage. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces before commas and periods. The high frequency of errors throughout the text makes it difficult for the reader to understand the intended message, and the final section is grammatically non-existent.

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