Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is a worldwide debate whether schools first prioritize formal learning. I partially agree with this statement because play as important as study for a child cognitive, social and behavior progress.

Admitedly, Formal study ensure a student better career opppurtunities. Moreover, best education play a holistic role in a student life. For intance, education foster confidence and best version of an individual. Through, valid qualification , a studenat can empower himself with unparalel career, buisness, or modern technology- ensure a nations progress.

Although there is no comparsion between sports and education but sports play a vital role to shape a developed nation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length at only 102 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you state a position, the ideas are severely underdeveloped. You mention that play is important for 'cognitive, social and behavior progress' and that formal study ensures 'career opportunities,' but these points are not expanded upon with sufficient explanation or relevant examples. To improve, you must provide a full introduction, two or three body paragraphs with detailed supporting arguments, and a clear conclusion. The current brevity prevents you from demonstrating the ability to develop a coherent argument as required by the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is a basic attempt to use linking words like 'Moreover' and 'Although,' the paragraphing is insufficient and the logical progression is interrupted by the brevity of the text. The ideas are presented in a fragmented manner rather than as a cohesive argument. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details and a concluding sentence. Use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the overall flow of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and there are several spelling errors, such as 'Admitedly,' 'opppurtunities,' 'studenat,' and 'unparalel.' These errors, combined with the restricted range of vocabulary, make the writing feel basic. You rely on simple phrasing, such as 'best education play a holistic role.' To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise, academic vocabulary and ensure accurate spelling. Focus on learning collocations and topic-specific terminology related to education and child development to express your ideas with greater sophistication and clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'There is a worldwide debate whether schools first prioritize' (missing 'about' and 'should'), 'play as important as' (missing 'is'), and 'a child cognitive' (should be 'a child's cognitive'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and possessive forms. Practice constructing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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