Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.
To what extent do you agree with this opinion?
How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the current era, majority of the schools focuses on the traditional teaching style. I completely agree with this notion because educational institutions are still using same books outlet and old teaching methods in this modern era. Aditionally, it is much essential to do some physical activities in the form of games in schools at primary level. These types of activites helps a lot in the development of student growth in the form of mental, physical and also curriculum activites.
From past to till now, educational institutions use constant method of teaching to the students. In facts they are studying old form of books yet now to teach new generation with same traditional techniques. Like the books which i read in my childhood at primary level in class 2 are still teaching to new generation which are in this class level. Additionally, schools are still using traditional teaching methods like same strictness of time, homework and number of books and also exams evaluation which we experienced 20 years ago. In this modern era, they need to change their teaching style, education environment and ad other activities to growm the children intellectual level.
Morever, It is benefical to ad some physical activies in the school with curriculum activities especially at primary level. For example, educational institutions can ad some quiz games, puzzles, and different types of competiton include race, cricket, football at primary level. These types of activities just no help in betterment of health and mind grow but also will boost interest of children in the study and school.
In conclusion, Huge amount of schools are yet following old teaching techniques and study material which we aquire some decades ago. They should need to upgrade these things to gave quality of knowledge according to demand and current era. Morever, schools need to plus some physical activities with curriculum activities which will just no help in educational ground but also help in attraction toward reading and studying.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, expressing a clear position on formal learning and discussing the importance of play alongside study. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding traditional teaching relies heavily on anecdotal repetition about books and exams rather than fully exploring deeper educational philosophies. When discussing play, the student mentions games like cricket and football, which appropriately supports the second prompt question, but the ideas remain under-developed. Because all parts of the prompt are addressed and a position is maintained, the essay fits best within Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is generally coherent with an overall logical arrangement, dividing ideas into introduction, body paragraphs addressing each part of the prompt, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used, though paragraph two is somewhat long and dense. Cohesive devices are attempted using transitional phrases such as 'Aditionally', 'Morever', and 'In conclusion', but some are misspelled or used rather mechanically. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'these things' in the concluding paragraph. Overall, the organizational structure is adequate to earn a Band 6.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words like 'educational institutions', 'intellectual level', and 'curriculum activities'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'majority of the schools focuses' instead of 'focus', 'much essential' instead of 'very essential', 'activites', 'Aditionally', 'benefical', 'competiton', 'aquire', and 'plus' used as a verb. These errors do not heavily impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'These types of activites helps a lot in the development of student growth...' However, grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'majority... focuses', 'activites helps'), article usage (e.g., 'in the form of mental, physical and also curriculum activites'), and awkward phrasing ('which we aquire some decades ago'). While meaning remains mostly clear to the reader, the high frequency of grammatical and mechanical errors places this response firmly at Band 5.0.
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