Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Yes,i agree with this opinion because i think its important for childerns to focus on formal learning .When childerns focus on formal learning instead of informal learning they minds become more sharp and active.They interseted in formal learning and enjoy . I think physical games is very important for childerns in play ground and play games in classroom.The childerns are relaxed and become happy after playing games.Games make them healthy and active.After playing games they become more active in classroom. For example;when teacher shows some activity in classroom the childerns attract with this activity and attract with his teacher.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is severely under-length, containing only 99 words compared to the minimum requirement of 250 words. Because of this, the ideas are severely underdeveloped. The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt—expressing a view on formal learning and discussing the importance of play—by stating 'i agree with this opinion' and noting that 'physical games is very important.' However, the position is simplistic, lacks extended supporting examples, and fails to meet the basic length and development expectations for an Academic Task 2 essay. Consequently, the score is heavily penalised for under-length and lack of task fulfilment, resulting in a Band 3.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text consisting of short, repetitive sentences. There is virtually no logical progression of ideas, and cohesive devices are almost entirely absent apart from basic repetition of words like 'childerns' and 'games' and a misplaced 'For example;'. Sentences are joined weakly or abruptly, such as moving from classroom learning to playground games without transitional links. The overall organization fails to meet the standards of coherent academic writing, which restricts the score to Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary is very basic, highly repetitive, and restricted to everyday items such as 'childerns', 'games', 'learning', and 'classroom'. There are frequent word-formation and spelling errors, including 'childerns' instead of 'children', 'interseted' instead of 'interested', and 'minds become more sharp'. Attempts at less common vocabulary are absent. While the meaning is generally decipherable despite the lexical limitations, the limited range and constant repetition constrain the score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing relies exclusively on simple sentence structures (e.g., 'Games make them healthy and active') and contains numerous basic grammatical and punctuation errors. There are repeated subject-verb agreement issues ('childerns focus... they minds become', 'physical games is very important'), incorrect capitalization ('Yes,i'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing such as 'when teacher shows some activity in classroom the childerns attract with this activity'. Complex structures are not successfully attempted, and errors are frequent throughout the short text, leading to a Band 4.0.

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