Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Primary education is the base of child, where he/she learn basic fundamentals of life, primary education is essential in growth of childern. Primary education should focus on learning and as well as there outdoor activities because It's an age where childern do not have any interest in learning, so primary education must focus on for learning and as well as extra curricular activities.

Beginning with learning in early school stage, where childern's bases are made. A good and quality education is very essentail in starting days of school. They should know about the right and wrong decisions,things,direction. Early learning stages can shape the child future, so it's very important to do strong focus on each and everything of a child. Primary stage education is very important a child knows how to write,speak and think.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response only partially addresses the prompt due to severe under-length. The student attempts to discuss primary education and the balance between formal learning and outdoor activities, touching on the two-part question regarding whether schools focus too much on formal learning and the importance of play. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack specific examples or extended arguments. Furthermore, the total word count is only 134 words, falling significantly short of the 250-word minimum requirement. This major shortfall severely restricts the development of the topic, leading to a band score of 4.0 under the task achievement criteria.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response exhibits some basic organization with an introduction and a body paragraph, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed sentences. For example, the transition 'Beginning with learning in early school stage' is awkward and grammatically incomplete. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second paragraph simply continues the vague thoughts from the first without a clear thematic shift. Repetitive phrasing is also present, which disrupts the logical flow and makes the overall arrangement difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and occasionally inaccurate. The student frequently recycles simple words like 'education', 'learning', and 'child'. There are notable word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'do strong focus' instead of 'focus strongly' and 'starting days of school' instead of 'early years of schooling'. Less common lexical items are largely absent, and the limited range of vocabulary strains the reader's understanding in several places.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. The majority of sentences are simple or contain faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('where he/she learn', 'childern do not'), incorrect pronoun usage ('where he/she learn... growth of childern'), and punctuation mistakes. Furthermore, pluralization and spelling errors are common, such as 'childern'. These frequent errors frequently impede communication and require the reader to decode the intended meaning.

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