Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people argue that primary schools focus too much on formal learning.

To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

How important do you think it is for children to play as well as learn in the primary school classroom?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

TASK 2

In recent year, focusing on education has become widely debated issue. While some people opposing this trend. I partially agree with this statement and provide my opinion.

On the one hand, people argue with schools to give more attention toward study from beginning. People make their ward perfect in study. They focusing toward goals and acheivements. Pupils who engaged in sports activities slow down their progress. This will also slow down their learning ability. For example, student who lacks interest in study could not able to learn basic skills. Students also down their confidence in study.

On the other hand, students who play and study together in same school benifitial for them, they can also balance their life according to their routine. Young one who learning in primary schools have less burden on their shoulders. They can also develop their skill and boost their physical and mental growth. For example, this will help them to learn basic skills and make them socially active during learning. This will reduce their burden and threats related to their life.

In my opinion, children should learn basic skills in primary schools, and this will also leads to holistical development. The elders and teachers encourage their youngerone regarding study and games, help them to make flexsible according to their day to day activities.

In conclusion, although people have distinct argument with the trend. I, however, think that there should be balanced decision taken for this topic and we should give priority to primary education as well as palying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing formal learning and the role of play in primary schools, presenting a partial agreement stance. However, the development of ideas remains limited and under-developed. For instance, the arguments regarding how students who engage in sports slow down their progress or how play reduces threats related to life are vague and lack clear extension or concrete support. The position is somewhat discernible, but the overall treatment of the dual-part prompt is basic, leading to a partial fulfillment of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic organizational structure with clear paragraphing, separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression across the text as ideas jump somewhat abruptly between points without smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are used, but they tend to be repetitive or mechanical, such as the repeated use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making the logical flow disjointed at times.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic points about education and learning. There are noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation that may cause some difficulty for the reader, such as 'In recent year' instead of years, 'acheivements' (spelling), 'benifitial', 'holistical', and 'flexsible'. The range of vocabulary is restricted, and attempts at less common lexical items frequently result in inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex sentences that are heavily flawed. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that can cause difficulty for the reader, including missing articles ('student who lacks interest'), incorrect verb forms ('could not able to learn', 'Young one who learning'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('People focusing toward goals'). These persistent errors restrict the complexity and readability of the sentences.

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